I’ve really enjoyed this so far. Thanks for posting it. As for criticism, maybe take a second to let things sink in before moving to the next scene.
Like when Dan first escapes you could have had him laughing maniacally or something. Just my opinion.
I’ve really enjoyed this so far. Thanks for posting it. As for criticism, maybe take a second to let things sink in before moving to the next scene. Like when Dan first escapes you could have had him laughing maniacally or something. Just my opinion.