The Arrancar

Literally, the only criticism I have seen is that the MC is female. People give one star just because of that alone. Take that thumb out of your a*s and read something else. The one-star reviews aren't even reviews. They hate the fact that the MC is a female. I highly recommend reading this book as it is interesting with the different take on a Bleach fanfic.

Author Here! This is my first attempt at something like this but if I don't give my work five stars who will! Constructive criticism welcome!

The story is great i love the idea of seeing the world from the hollow perspective, wish the main character had more screen time though she hasn't done actual combat in ages

Story that you make is the best bleach fanfic that I ever read. The plot is not boring and change of perspection to Hollow point of view is something fresh rather than shinigami POV

From my perspective I think storys with female leads suck and are overall boring. (With rare exceptions) But I have at least 3 brain cells and can see that this is just my preference not a direct and fair judgement of a story. So while I might not like the story I won't start crying about it. I'm leaving this here to balance out all the people crying. And for those that want an actual review the story itself is pretty good from what I've seen.

I like it, it's very 'to the point' but that's not bad. It seems like the author is not including anything that is not furthering or advancing the plot, which is taught in writing classes. It was the first thing that popped out to me. Mc's character design is lacking but that's because the story is 'to the point' the general 'goodness' of the story makes up for it, I would have loved for it to be a little slower but what you are doing is already great. I like what you are doing and hope to see more from you in the future.

Short Version: I like where the story is, but I wish more time was put into the background. Backstory is basically just Bleach with nothing else really changed besides immediate area of MC. Long Version: I think more time should have been spent on MC journey to becoming strong as it feels like she was doing pushups and went from basic hollow to Aranncar in no time (even though around 100 years passed). It can still technically be retconned with flashbacks if author feels like it, but not necessary obviously. Suggestions: If i were to suggest one it might be a connection with Rukia as she likes rabbits and MC is Rabbit Hollow. Perhaps she wants to explore the world a bit and happens across Rukia's abandonment and wanting to know how things go from there she waits only for no one to show up as Rukia gets weaker and so eventually she steps in and takes care of Rukia for a bit. Then plot happens and Rukia leaves not really knowing about MC, but there is still a connection that Rukia can feel when she comes across MC again. As for MC motives it can be as simple as she wants plot to remain consistent so she knows what is going on. Conclusion: Good story, wish there was more background development. I look forward to seeing where you go from here. I haven't written anything so take my suggestions with a bunch of salt.

The story itself is good, the only negative point was that the author neglected some characters and their characteristics too much, I understand that it is a fan-fic, but an example, it is highly unlikely that Kisuke would trust two Vasto Lord in such a short time, he is extremely intelligent and very very careful, it would take a long time for him to trust them, and Aizen, he is so if not more intelligent and careful, you could have elaborated more on the protagonist's psychological war, for example Aizen testing the protagonist's loyalty and his partners while they try to somehow trick Aizen into thinking he is in control, after all Aizen is a manipulative and perfectionist master, the protagonist acts as if she is the owner of the place, Aizen would hate that, because he doesn't want one army, he wants pawns to serve as a sacrifice for him, he would never let the Hollows become independent of him, so it would have been interesting for the protagonist to have created this hierarchy and her schemes in the dark, away from Aizen, to be a surprise factor, of course it's a fan-fic, it's just a few points that I think would be interesting.

I don't really like bleach so I won't read this however I'll give you a 5star because some assholes are giving you 1star just because of female lead

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Una muy interesante historia vista desde el lado opuesto al tradicional usando un "MC" femenino en el grupo villano. Sinceramente eta historia promete y no puedo aguantar la anciedad por el proximo capitulo

I like this story, its good, have a different approach, author sama please give the main character more screen time. btw when i read the review why there are a bad people give this story 1 star just because the MC is female, please give this story a chance and try it first before you judge and give bad reviews.

yo! what do you mean "let's have a Hollow main character" ?? Ichigo is a Hollow! .

I truthfully enjoyed this fanfiction. All the previous bleach ones that I've read are all similar, but this brings something new with the perspective of someone from another side, it gives the hollows a more human feel, and I was able to feel like I could connect to the story well. I have no hate for this, but a more frequent chapter posting would be nice