Overall most of characters personalities are being butcher. How people call each other is like reading elementaryshooler diary. it has good world building so far.
4 years ago
17
Will_Caruso
Just a question why would anyone freely give away their plans in a public media scrum. This seams to be showing off in the worst way possible and prideful to a fault. I am at a loss to understand the complete lack of SELF PRESERVATION for this cartoon villain Harry is turning in too.
4 years ago
10
seb3578
To be honest the characters and story feel rushed and is just bad to read, this story could be good as it has some nice ideas. Though the problem i have is the author feels inexperienced and doesnt know how to write good character development.
4 years ago
7
Jerry_Magnuson
just an idea if you were to use my Overlord gate with memories of Orochimaru you could in theory open a gate to the Naruto world at any point in his memory is there for making this a crossover but you could also use the gates to go to other worlds as well just an idea for future development
4 years ago
3
RikySmith123
love the book and love the powers you gave him. I hope there will be a bit of romance but I hope you don't drop👍👍👍👍👍hope he gets his vengeance on the traitor.
Overall most of characters personalities are being butcher. How people call each other is like reading elementaryshooler diary. it has good world building so far.
Just a question why would anyone freely give away their plans in a public media scrum. This seams to be showing off in the worst way possible and prideful to a fault. I am at a loss to understand the complete lack of SELF PRESERVATION for this cartoon villain Harry is turning in too.
To be honest the characters and story feel rushed and is just bad to read, this story could be good as it has some nice ideas. Though the problem i have is the author feels inexperienced and doesnt know how to write good character development.
just an idea if you were to use my Overlord gate with memories of Orochimaru you could in theory open a gate to the Naruto world at any point in his memory is there for making this a crossover but you could also use the gates to go to other worlds as well just an idea for future development
love the book and love the powers you gave him. I hope there will be a bit of romance but I hope you don't drop👍👍👍👍👍hope he gets his vengeance on the traitor.
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so far it is a great book and i hooe that you make more chapters but you dont rush and make a ton of mistakes like some authors i read books from
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