Leading Heavy Rain and Clouds
(Her Point Of View)
LEADING yourself to a future that you know you'll be happy and don't regret everything.
you can feel the HEAVY feeling inside you because you're in love.
every drop of RAIN there is always CLOUDs right after. Like every tears, there's a soft thing or soft person who always there when you're down. Hug you, kiss you, and cover you so that when he/she moved away you're already a sun who shining brightly
Look how happy and miserable our life is. You feel happy, you feel in love, you feel sad, you feel down and then happy again. Our life is recycling every minute.
But...
It doesn't mean that there's a forever. If there's a beginning then it always ends up. Your happiness has an ending.
(His Point of View)
I love her so much...
It's funny because I didn't realize that I was falling for her. The girl that I hate the most, the girl that usually annoying but here I am
It's been years but my love for her didn't melt.
I always understand the situation and pray "oh God thank you because you gave me a wonderful gift"
When I found out that I'm in love with her never in my life think to replace her. Because for me? no one can beat my love of my life
LEADING HEAVY RAIN AND CLOUD "I love you, always"
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So far so good. Your story has a good plot. The flow is okay however, the style isn't my cup of tea. Few grammars, lack of interpretation, and too direct. Please use a Capital letter in the first character of the word if it's from the beginning of the sentence. The lines and paragraphs are too messy in my eyes. I couldn't help but slightly lose my interest to read. Don't worry, editing helps, revise more, and keep writing. It's a great story btw ^^
hey there friend! wtf ur story is so good! keep it up bijj! and may the good hands and mind be with you! godbless and more power, prove that your a very outstanding author..goodluck, merde🤗🥰😍🤩🥰🤩🥰😍😍🥰
Hello! You’re story is actually really cool. But you should remember to use capitalisation for the start of your sentences, and punctuation. For example on the first part you put: “damn Zharina what’s your answer in number 5?!” my bestfriend shouted at me at the back. i looked at her and glared. You could make it like this instead: “Damn Zharina, what’s your answer for number 5?!” My bestriend shouting at me from behind. I glared at her with a meaningful look. But overall its a nice one!
I’m defintly a fan of the relationship between the male and female protagonists, and I really like the development too. I’d say gramma needs a little work, but as english isn’t your first language, I really am impressed. Also, I think my favourite character is Ava!!