Journey in Pokémon

Hi, author here. My second hand at Pokemon, hopefully much better as well. I have improved my writing a bit since the last one. Please give me some constructive criticism so that I may improve

It been a great read so far even made my balls tingle so great job to you author. keep doing what you doing its working out great .......... just give the mc a little more character to him almost feels like he a robot

I don't wanna bore you with all of the details of this story, just know that it's worth reading and with currently 8 chapters, you get at least a pretty good direction the Fic is heading in, and as I said, you should just consider it. And for the people like me who are Vini's Fans, who waited for him to come back, his writing has certainly improved, I don't know how much or if it even did, but it is refreshing to read. That's all folks, and just as I said. You should consider reading this.

finally you are back . love your work love you

Quality stuff. Need more chapters though as fix has just begun, like the way you train Pokemon. 140 characters 140 characters 140 characters 140 characters 140 characters

Great to see you back man. Fics looking good and grammars much better than before, it seems less edgy and more realistic. Though one thing I fear is the main character remain stagnant as he did in your previous fic. Good luck

Gran historia con un gran potencial ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

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Great work man. Love the direction of the story. Would have preferred if you had a different starter but still has a lot of potential. Don't drop please

Great story. Like the realism and I'm happy you trying out non self insert characters, it does more opportunities and I find them better to read, also your grammar grown so much better since your first story. Hope you don't drop

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By far a quite interesting character building in the story is done, you shouldn't drop it, add a manipulative nature and a perfect MC for a realistic Pokémon world, will be created.