Dance Of The Elite

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i find that this book has a lot of potential, but i find 3 major problems, 1 the chapters are extremely short, that combined with the lack of imagery, or character building leaves alot to be desired from the characters at the beginning. 2 the story so far is confusing with how its written, the events that transpire are so abrupt and sudden the reader doesnt have a clue about what happened. 3 the way the book transitions from paragraph to paragraph, event to event, ate very choppy and lacks a flow of cohesiveness. there is a lack of diversity in words, i.e. instead I, He, She, its always the full name of the character, this hurts how well the book flows together in my opinion. the pros of this book is that it has potential, and a lot of it, the world, power system, along with the presentation and characters all have the ability to turn this book into something amazing. ill re read the book, and edit my review if things change, but as of now this book has potential, and its that potential that leaves there something to be desired in the writing.

This is so good make more i would love to see more its actually very interesting and i love it yessssss youuuuuuuuu gottttttt thissssssssss

This book is exciting to Read. what i have read so far is amazing and i cant wait for More!!Keep up the great work!

Honestly it’s a great book although could do better with world background other than that this is such a great book can’t wait for more! …………………..

There’s a lot of novels out there but this one has its own good spots and I can’t wait to see where it goes but I don’t really like how there’s only 5 chapters out……………………….: ………..

Honestly a great book and i cant wait For more chapters to come out and this really grew so fast and im happy that i found this boo….

I really don't know how the story will go as it was already confusing at the first chapter. I viewed this for collecting material to improve my writing' BUt since I can feel the color of the story, I'll advice you something. Improve your writing in a bit understandable manner. Add more details not just words like, sad, mad, angry or something. And explain what are the sorroundings and what is the expression of the MC in every situation. Read other novels as for you not to get ignorant. It's also a trait a creator should have. When it comes to character development, make it more convincing. After all the thing that you lacks is material collecting. What I mean is there is no unique writing style and plot, there is always inspiration in every creation. Well, it's only my opinion, you can contradict that phrase. But really, I would love to see your progress in the future but with the current condition of this story, I have to drop it. That's all. Keep on writing!

It was very slow in the beginning but it started to pick up pace but I would have liked it a lot better with more chapters out already other than that it’s pretty amazing……….