The Physical Cultivator

I love this book! I am attentively waiting for a new chapter to be released. The word choice humanizes Ryan and Ning, yet the author is able to draw a line between the two as we see Nings' character develop. If reincarnation, action, and magic intrigues you...then this is a read. This is not a slow paced read. I quite frankly read it in one night and chuckled at witty remarks that characters made.

I finished reading all the chapters and here are some points I want to help point out and hopefully help you with writing: 1. In order to have smoother transitions, be careful when writing in first person because everything is seen through you. Aside from using "I", try variations using "me", "my" etc and refrain from continuously using "I will...", "I went...", "I did", etc. 2. For description-wise, because everything is seen from your POV, make sure to describe a little more about yourself. You do this well for some stuff but in terms of worldbuilding some other things fall a bit short. Aside from being built, maybe include characteristics such as height, hair, eye colour, etc. This goes for other characters as well, such as your mother. Be sure to describe more on your settings, like the gym you went to, how was the atmosphere like. How is the new world, aside from just a grass field, a forest, and a mansion. Some more descriptions focusing on the world-building will really improve the novel a lot. Hope to see more soon. There's also some punctuation and slight run-on sentences you can go back and edit.