After Mu Lan died as a result of his revenge, he traveled 20 years back in time. Mu Lan, who had the knowledge of the future, was now a 15-year-old boy and he was planning his revenge for the second time.
Very hard to read, nice story but the grammar😩 I hope the guy gets some help editing this.
Good luck.
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3 years ago
2
SirZed
Horrible. While the idea behind the story is sound, the grammar makes it hard to get into. I mean, how can you constantly go back and forth with he and she? And not realise that you're doing it?
3 years ago
2
Hudson_Lucas
I highly recommend it, it entered my top 10, both the character and the story are very engaging.
this story has a lot of future!!!
Looking forward to more chapters and see how the MC's revenge goes.
3 years ago
0
Kyrasuum
story falls in line with usual second chance vrmmo stories. the writing and overall story however is quite good and enjoyable.
only real downside for me is the grammar. it reads barely any better than a machine translation. if author could get a editor to help with his grammar this could easily become an amazing work.
if you are interested in this genre of fiction I'd recommend adding to your library, checking in every once and a whole, throwing a stone occasionally, and when author finally gets an editor you binge read this like there's no tomorrow.
3 years ago
0
leorichard2021_0515
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact leorichard2021*@*outlook.com (please ignore both * when sending email). A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
Very hard to read, nice story but the grammar😩 I hope the guy gets some help editing this. Good luck. ------------------------------------------------------------------------
Horrible. While the idea behind the story is sound, the grammar makes it hard to get into. I mean, how can you constantly go back and forth with he and she? And not realise that you're doing it?
I highly recommend it, it entered my top 10, both the character and the story are very engaging. this story has a lot of future!!! Looking forward to more chapters and see how the MC's revenge goes.
story falls in line with usual second chance vrmmo stories. the writing and overall story however is quite good and enjoyable. only real downside for me is the grammar. it reads barely any better than a machine translation. if author could get a editor to help with his grammar this could easily become an amazing work. if you are interested in this genre of fiction I'd recommend adding to your library, checking in every once and a whole, throwing a stone occasionally, and when author finally gets an editor you binge read this like there's no tomorrow.
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact leorichard2021*@*outlook.com (please ignore both * when sending email). A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.