Where it all went wrong?

Horror13 Chapters45.6K Views
Author: DaoistFlevoi
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"How did you find me here?" -Valerie

"The only thing you need to know is I love you." -Bryce



He loves her relentlessly. To her, his love is suffocating. She lost everything because of him yet he claims he loves her. While Bryce is trying to own her, Valerie is trying to end this game once and for all.

Someone is watching the whole game of hide and seek from afar and their actions hold the power to change the obvious outcome.

Who will be the winner when secrets start to unfold?

Even the predictable ending seems unpredictable...

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This work contains multiple points of view, descriptions of abuse, murder, and self-harm so the reader's discretion is advised.

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New chapters released on: Monday, Tuesday, and Thursday

(Also few surprise updates will be done from time to time.)

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It's my first novel.

Positive criticism is always welcome.

Please let me know how I can do better.

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Evertruth727_
Evertruth727_

From the first chapter: Simply amazing I must say. I had never really invested myself into the horror genre books. But this one surely did piqued my interest. The sense of mystery at the end of the first chapter. 10/10

3 years ago
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Rin_Arizu
Rin_Arizu

The plot is nice and good, the mysteries are intriguing too. There's a point where I was confused but nonetheless it's a very good novel with solid plot.

3 years ago
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Scarlet_Wolf96
Scarlet_Wolf96

interesting and caugh my attention. I understand this storyline. the atmosphere is also starting to feel. I can only give 1 suggestion. usually "calm before thunderstorm". Just reading a few chapters made me happy. don't forget to add spices that can make your readers' hearts beat fast and are typical of horror. but this alone is good. I like it... 😊👍❤

3 years ago
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Ergelina
Ergelina

I like the plot, and what you've come up with. Just one thing, you could make it more fluid? No need to write it out it's happening in front of the building, make us read it... give her the action. Keep it up!

3 years ago
2
leorichard2021
leorichard2021

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3 years ago
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Darine_ALRAMMAH
Darine_ALRAMMAH

I really love this novel because of the story line and characters. The writing quality is also great and the plot is, like, AMAZING. Definitely recommend it. I could also see how much you love horror just by your choice of words and scenes. You're a gifted author, I hope you realize that and keep on posting. PS: Added to library!

3 years ago
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D_C_5510
D_C_5510

The characters here seems well written and have good potential. Up to chapter 4 the suspense is kept well. I'm looking forward to read future chapters and learn what made this characters act how they are acting.

3 years ago
2
Reo_
Reo_

I can see that you your self like horror by the way you write. The story is something amazing so far, what really stood out to me where the characters and their decisions. So far so good! The story has potential keep it up!

3 years ago
2
Lancee
Lancee

A good read. The story itself has potential to be something trully amazing, the plot seems promising through out the 2 chapters and the character's are life like which is good at the reader's interpretation. Overall i liked the story.

3 years ago
2
Ash_Stay
Ash_Stay

Loved the story. The plot is amazing and the first chapter hooked me. The emotions of the characters are delivered well. Good job author. I will keep on reading the story.

3 years ago
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Cranky_Reader_3098
Cranky_Reader_3098

Good storyline with continuous tension. The mystery is well kept. My only complaint is that, the chapters can be a bit longer. Other than that the story itself is good. Keep writing more exciting episodes!

3 years ago
1
Devanshi_Rathod
Devanshi_Rathod

I have to say that, this novel has a quite interesting and intriguing plot going on. The concept of unknown and mystery, is quite refreshing and amazing. I can see, this novel has a great potential ahead. Besides that, I really appreciate the creativity and insight of author. KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK, DEAR AUTHOR. This novel is landing straight into my library, I will keep on reading it :)

3 years ago
1
BeauLivre
BeauLivre

The story is well written and progresses at the right pace. The dialogues are emotional, gripping, sharp and this is well enhanced by the protagonists. The suspense is of course there as well as the progression of the story. Added to my bookstore

3 years ago
1
Blessing_Nwodo_16
Blessing_Nwodo_16

Very interesting concept, well written. I love it a lot and I will definitely recommend it to anyone that is interested in mystery novels 🤗🤗🤗

3 years ago
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fahad_nawaz
fahad_nawaz

As an author, I could say that the skill of this author is on a level of its own..... I loved the way how there was this constant sense of mystery lingering as I was reading the Chapters...if you are reading this comment and can't decide whether to give this a try or not.....ill say just give it a try, you won't regret it.

3 years ago
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