Meet Shin, a modern man from our society get thrown into My Hero Academia World. What can go wrong right?

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Notes: this fanfic is AU

MHA:To Be The Strongest

ACTION

ADVENTURE

ROMANCE

REINCARNATION

WEAKTOSTRONG

Writing Quality: ★★★☆☆
Technically, the writing is clean. There aren’t any noticeable grammar, spelling, or sentence structure mistakes, which is commendable. However, the heavy use of filler — such as repeated third-person narration and self-glorifying inner monologues — really drags the quality down. It makes the prose feel bloated and repetitive rather than sharp and engaging. So while it’s clean on a surface level, the style itself weakens the overall impact.

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Update Stability: ★★★★★
For the 18 chapters released so far, the author has been consistent and stable with their uploads. That deserves recognition.

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Story Development: ★★☆☆☆
The story had a bit of potential — especially with the early training arc starting on the protagonist’s fourth birthday — but that intrigue fades fast. The rest of the story feels rushed and follows a very generic formula. Plot points jump from one to the next without proper buildup, and the pacing leaves no time for emotional impact or tension. It’s not awful, but it’s forgettable.

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Character Design: ★★☆☆☆
The characters — especially the protagonist — lack depth. You get more development from his parents than from the supposed lead. Instead of character growth or meaningful interaction, we’re given repeated, shallow descriptions, particularly with side characters like the ‘observant one.’ They’re more archetypes than people, which makes them hard to care about or even remember.

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World Building: ★★☆☆☆
the world feels empty. There’s no expansion on My Hero Academia’s existing world, no new settings or cultural elements introduced. The story just moves mechanically from location to location without adding anything fresh or immersive. It leans entirely on the original setting without building something of its own.


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As usual — strong concept, but the execution falls flat.

Let’s start with the first logic issue. In the protagonist’s first fight, he stops between the villain and the victim for a few seconds. Then suddenly, the villain can’t see his face because he was ‘moving too fast’? Come off it — he stood there long enough for the bloke to sketch him from memory. That bit just doesn’t make sense.

Then in the second fight, he’s clearly with his friends when the villain shows up. The guy looks right at him, talks to him during the fight, and one of the friends even warns him, ‘It’s too dangerous!’ — and our hero goes, ‘I’ve got this.’
All good, yeah? But then suddenly, everyone’s got amnesia — the villain, the mates, like someone flipped a switch. Only the ‘observant’ friend remembers, and somehow that leads him to figure out the hero’s identity — just because he wasn’t scared? Doesn’t add up, mate. Feels like the story’s bending over backwards to protect a twist.

Now for the writing itself — the novel is full of filler.
Way too much third-person narration and self-glorifying internal monologues. There’s barely any natural dialogue between characters. Instead of showing relationships through interaction, it’s just the author telling us what each character is like — especially the side characters. For example, every time the ‘observant’ character appears, we get the same repeated line about how he’s ‘quiet and thoughtful’ or whatever, over and over again. It feels more like someone describing their DnD character sheet than writing a novel.

By the end, I couldn’t even remember the names of the characters — not because I wasn’t paying attention, but because they barely felt alive.

Character development? Honestly, barely there.
The protagonist feels hollow. His parents have more depth than him. You hear more about who they are, what they feel, and why they act a certain way — while the main character’s just… there. No growth, no change, no punch.

Worldbuilding? Thin as paper.
Sure, we know My Hero Academia’s world, but the author adds nothing new. Only U.A. gets any real love — the rest of the world feels like filler. It’s just plot hopping from point A to B like it’s following a checklist. There’s no flavour, no grit, nothing that makes you feel like this world actually lives and breathes.

Story development:
It’s not terrible, but it’s bang-average. The only bit that sparked any interest was the training arc starting on his fourth birthday — that had potential. But the rest? Generic and rushed. Like the author was in a sprint to get to the next big fight without building the road there properly.

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Advice for Improvement

Logic & Plot Consistency:
	•	Step back and read your scenes fresh. Ask yourself: Does this hold up logically? If not, rework it. No shortcuts with reader suspension of disbelief.
	•	Make sure character reactions and the world’s internal rules are consistent, especially during action scenes.

Character Development:
	•	Let the main character feel human. Show doubts, drive, flaws — not just monologues. Give him space to actually grow.
	•	Build relationships through natural dialogue and shared experiences, not narration.

Worldbuilding:
	•	Get beyond U.A. — give us something fresh. A new city, new culture, even just small details that make the world feel bigger than the plot.
	•	Use interactions to reveal world details — avoid info-dumping and lifeless travel scenes.

Story Development:
	•	Slow it down a notch. Let moments build. Not every scene needs to sprint to the finish line.
	•	Develop tension and stakes gradually — make the quiet moments matter as much as the loud ones.

Give the characters soul, bring the world to life, and the story might just hit the mark next time.

The spelling is great and well written you won't find any misspellings so that a plus for me but everything else is so generic it's like ive read this exact story 100 times now. so yeah if you like a classic mha fanfic then you will like these it's slightly above average because of the grammer but there really isn't anything new here and that's isn't really a bad thing just not my cup of tea now considering I've read something like this hundreds of times now.

 Ok so the summary is already f*cked up. A "modern man from our society" you say. Wtf do you mean? As if MHA isn't modern enough. What, they still live in medieval ages? With quirks and swords? Should we call it "My Knight" instad of "My hero" now? Bruh...

You got a good thing going on here, but it could be better.
It just needs to be refined :
1- It's a Fanfic, so try not to make it to emotional and shit.
2- Add more details to your character's growth, so the readers can have a sense of how strong your (MC) is and will be in the future.
3- You're trying hard to make your MC seem like the responsible type and you're failing at it.
4- you're not providing enough info about the timeline and the background events that go on in the "MHA".
there's still more points to add but I'm too lazy to do that.
And hey, you don't need to rush and try to create a great story.
Just do what you can with what you have.


Have potencial. Need more dilapidation. But it's good enough for now. Your vocabulary idea is interesting, but maybe expanding and explaining the characters' internal conflicts from other angles would help you improve your understanding of the characters. Besides, you're already better than 90% of the stuff I read on this site, don't be discouraged by a few bad comments, you're good.

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