Devil’s Dominon

even if it 3 chaps, I'll still give 5 stars, but please fix the sentences cause it looks like they been space all the way

I really enjoy reading about mythologies and from the description this was one that handled that so i came in with high hopes and in 5 chapters it has done beautifully in doing that, the garden of babylon, dantes inferno and even the hinting of a wendigo in the latest chapter.

Your novel has amazing potential. It's already good as it is but fixing the paragraph spacing will make it even better. You're doing a good job. Keep it up 👍

The story has alot of potential.... i am a bit iffy on the two MCs. because they seem like crybabies, but honestly they are highschool students so they need a grow proces. i would just change the shape of your text without using tabs it makes it seem alot messier then it is. keep going it could be something worthwhile

Great story so far and has a lot of potential to be great. I advice the author to use grammarly or find an editor to help him grammatically

This story has potential. I suggest that the author write in past tense as, generally, that's more attractive to readers. Grammar isn't *too* bad, flow is quite nice, good storyline so far. Nice and enjoyable read if edited thoroughly. Good luck author

This story brims with immense potential and showcases a unique narrative. While the overall content is engaging, a touch of grammar refinement could elevate it to one of the top reads in its genre. I believe with some dedicated editing and consistent effort. This could become a favorite among readers.

I really like the author's writing style. The author has a certain way with words that keeps you wanting to read more. The book is easy to read and has little to no grammatical mistakes. Would definitely recommend this.

There aren’t many chapters and it takes quite a while to update. Characters have very much potential. Intense and fast paced beginning. There are some sentences that needs improvement. Like some sentences can be shortened to make it sound better. I saw the mistake you put capitalization after dialogue. Example: “He killed the animal,” He said. It sound be lowercase in “he said” because it is a continuation of the sentence, not a new sentence.

The story is good, the title is a little weird but okay. The overall writing quality is not bad but it's not good either. The book looks like it has potential.

I only read the first few chapters but it made me want to read the rest! However, I kept having the feeling that author is not used to the difference between telling and showing so that's one part I wish future chapters would address. Great work, cheers! [img=recommend]

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Had to give it a five. Although the writing comes off as anime styled, I definitely am drawn in. From the first chapter we are in a school setting with a pair of twins. And these twins end up experiencing creepy people holding candles and opening a book, chanting. The stuff you see in horror movies. Not going to spoil it all, but they are given a choice and I can say first three chapters are action packed. I was at the edge of my seat. I plan to keep reading more. Author did amazing!

What a nice story but please, author, use a spellchecker, like grammarly, or even just google docks. Thank you, thank you thankyuthanktuthankut

As many people said in reviews. I am also saying same. please fix presentation and work a little on grammar. Btw, story is interesting, start was great.