Fallout 4: Rebirth At Vault 81

My biggest problem with this story is that all the dialog feels robotic and un human.second problem is that the mc(mc's name is sico) system is weak 😔 to such a degree that It makes him weaker then a normal person in gaining stats and he stated with 7 intelligence he should level up way more and gain stats way more.

I really wanted to like this story. It's exactly the type of story I was looking for, or so I thought. The writing/translation is awful. It's nearly impossible to read. The characters are... incredibly unrelatable and story itself is super hard to follow. And I mean I like wish-fulfillment, sometimes it makes a great -relaxing- read, but this is too much. No one questions anything, the dialogue is so contrived and forced that it pains me to read it. Just... super disappointed. And before anyone says it gets better or something, I made it to chapter twenty. That's far enough I think. Nothing had improved by then

Terrible dialogue, terrible sentence structure, the author skips over important details simply because he/she forgets. Introduces a system but ignores it… then why even introduce it.

Just because this was a fallout novel and fallout is my all time favorite game. So i hope you doesn't drop this one author even though i know there was no chance you to drop it

You don’t need to put the name of the speaker in front of every phrase ._. It makes it unreadable

Hello Tang12 as a fan of your writing i will support this story, I can not wait to see what you can do with such World like Fallout.

So I didn't get very far because of the clunky and for lack of better term artificial dialogue as an example to potential readers all conversation are like this Sico"did you say something Jenny" Jenny"no, I've haven't made a peep" sico "I swear I heard something" the author claims it gets better but I checked up to chapter 70 and it's still in this script format and to the author when someone says artificial dialogue they mean they style not the content e.g "Did you say something Jenny" sico whispered. "no" came her crisp reply. Would be how one expects to read dialogue Other than that it's a good story sorry I couldn't stick around I do love fallout

Since it was Tang12 who made it, I believe it would be a great piece of work just like his other work! The world-building is definitely already perfect as it was based on Fallout 4, for other things I can't see but I believe it would be great! Keep up the spirit author!

The dialogue is extremely robotic and unsatisfying, besides that everything else is fine. Really hope the author can learn from other authors dialogue and improve

5 ⭐ just because you make a fallout fanfiction.

I'm going to chapter 20 For starters, it seems like the author forgot that Mc had learned beginner hand-to-hand combat, since it's not added in his state. The dialogue system is horrible, it is the worst thing you can use since you avoid showing the characters' expressions when speaking. Things happen too fast for my liking, plus you're going to tell me that you couldn't find skill magazines in all this time.

Play a game...especially with mods. You. get far better experience.

The only reason it’s not 5 stars is because of grammar and how fast it goes but that’s really it other than that great story and will continue to read.👍

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