MHA:-Glitch In Reality

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this is somehow worse than the story about the masochist fish. How do you make a story this boring? No seriously, teach me your wise ways on how to give myself a brain aneurysm. I had to skip through half of the dialogue cause of the cringe. truly someone needs to give you an award

Im glad thare are still people who just like me see this fact of how much of the great threat Izuku as a Vilian is to everyone in they world.

only thing i can say is that is a really good concept, just a bad execution with loopholes and forced scenario

Ahhh, it's frustrating that the hype that the author gives off falls flat when reading the FF. The grammar is decent but the sentence structure feels childish. Plus as others say, the MCs bad treatment seems fake. Its like your average FF with bland writing, although the idea is good. It's not a dumpster fire but the hole revenge feels like deku is whining about life.

I gotta say I’m very impressed by this storyline and how you managed to implement a good amount of the characters and their personalities in each chapter. I’m looking forward to future chapters and hope you don’t drop this.👍

great concept, we're still really early on but it has lots of potential.the grammar could be improved, but it's not necessarily bad and you could do with better exposition and find a better way to get point across.

the execution is just poor & everything feels flat. worst is probably the beginning being a near carbon copy of MHA: Undying but 1000x times worse

Very interesting story, i like your writing and how plot is done, And i hope Yoyorozu Momowill join to his side. Momo in bikini pic for you as my thanks for the story.

Its stupid, ridiculous and frankly, most people reading this review could probably write something better after 2-3 tries. Though, probably only the Pathetic Ass author will read this before deleting it and crying about the 1 star review to a 0 star story. Jesus, where to begin. whether its the terrible grade-school level writing or the "guhuhuh, I am more eviler than you" ahh character. its pathetic. I am all for Evil or Villain MCs but the character is clearly a self insert for the author, a woman-hating wannabe psycho who likely makes Joker Smiles to himself in the mirror and talks about how he is an Anarchist to his fellow Woman-Hating friends on Discord while thinking about how to R*pe women he met one time. The world itself is more poorly made than a school project held together by gum and toothpicks. The author is constantly pulling random bullshit out of thin air, acting like this is a Dystopian Future where smog fills the sky and a single hacker can turn a city into a hellhole.

Yeah… I’m gonna ask that you edit the early chapters so they aren’t blatantly copied. Especially in the parts where they don’t really fit. If you need more inspiration, twin Izuku fics are pretty common over on Wattpad. That said, I do like the direction you branched it off into. Less psycho more analyst. The romance options so far are also interesting.

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постоянное повторение предыдущих строк, откровенно говоря, раздражает. в главах они затягивают разговор и постоянно повторяют его, как будто для умственно отсталых. Иногда темы перескакивают друг в друга. The plot seems to be there, the idea is not bad, but why the hell did he want to go to UA school as a spy. Frankly, he seems like a loser, clinging to the chance to come back or be noticed and recognized.

Lo intente lo juro, pero este MC es realmente estúpido de nacimiento y eso se ve claramente cuando amenaza a All for One como si nada, sale todo perfecto no hay enojo ni ataques..... El mayor villano fue insultado tratado como un niño y solo se rió....... El autor cree que el MC es inteligente pero es el mayor estúpido del que leí en mí vida