Humans gained superiority over vampires and killed all of them. Only one managed to survive and escape, but he was on the brink of death. Can he survive and take revenge on these hateful humans? Only a miracle will change everything...
The story seems very interesting with lots of potential, but I'm very sorry to say this, but the writing quality is not that great.... 🥺
Some paragraphs are broken on wrong places, being cut in half in the middle of a dialogue. And some parts are written like you are writing a script instead of a story + the way you write the actions around the dialogue is unnatural and off putting.
Don't take my feedback to the heart, I'm just saying this because I wish for you to improve so I can enjoy the story. Please continue to write 🙏
3 months ago
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mikasouchan
Oh guys, I Hope you like my story
I tired to write it Clear, and so I hope you like it.
First chepter is not good enough but the story will Develope in the future
The story seems very interesting with lots of potential, but I'm very sorry to say this, but the writing quality is not that great.... 🥺 Some paragraphs are broken on wrong places, being cut in half in the middle of a dialogue. And some parts are written like you are writing a script instead of a story + the way you write the actions around the dialogue is unnatural and off putting. Don't take my feedback to the heart, I'm just saying this because I wish for you to improve so I can enjoy the story. Please continue to write 🙏
Oh guys, I Hope you like my story I tired to write it Clear, and so I hope you like it. First chepter is not good enough but the story will Develope in the future