Mobuseka:Leon's Adventure
Leon, a man who tragically died of exhaustion due to his sister's otome game, unexpectedly finds himself reincarnated as a young aristocrat named Leon Bartfort. However, he soon realizes that he is not alone in this body. Another mysterious entity already resides there, its voice echoing in his mind.
Who is this second consciousness? Is it a friend, an enemy, or something far more sinister? Will they be able to come to an agreement to share control over the body, or will a fierce struggle for dominance ensue? Or perhaps their interactions will lead to unforeseen consequences?
Intrigued? Then start reading!
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I'm back at Chapter 4 (Reviewers only read upto chapter 2 so I doubled it) and so from what I can see, these bad reviews are utter nonsense hating over the fact that the MC shares a body with another person. I did not see any of the "so called bad writing" nor did I see "author self insert", MC just seems to be a guy really obsessed with the original work as far as I can tell. TLDR; the reviewers have my permission to disappear from existence, please pin this author.
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a pretty good fanfiction, if you want to read something like MC stuck with the protagonist and work together, not for beta webnovel reader who think with their lower brain.
Don't mind the negative comments which outrights dismiss your story. You have a lot of potential keep up an please don't abandon this fan fic.
Stupid cringe trash,with embracing humor. Great job.
Hope you'll like my fanfic, I'm trying my best and won't drop it.----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
k... Its good, but author... How do you want to attract readers and not receive backlash and be whipped by readers if you don't have a synopsis and you don't explain properly at the early chapters or even at the synopsis that you will fuse both of their souls completely later?. I recommend you go read the "Book of Authors" here in WN so you can at least learn the basics. As for the novel, you lack worldbackground, you don't describe the surroundings at all but rather gloss over them. You also do not physically describe the characters. The story development also feels rushed. (Went there, did that). You gotta describe what the character is doing, show their thought process to flesh out their character. I would give this a 5.5/10
I've been looking for a normal story about mobusek for a long time. Thanks to the author. 😁😁😁👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
rather simple english with shorter chapters which is ok since thats a way better quality than most works here ... mc is schizophrenic no other word to out it... kinda ruins the story for me which is why the rating is so low foe character dev. and story dev. also both personalities are rather bad in a lot of ways. could have bee interesting from the preset but well...
la única razón por la que no tiene 5 estrellas es por qué va en el cap 12 hasta que escribí esto y creo que la seguiré día a día, ojalá no acabe como las como 10 historias de mobuseka en 30 caps dropeadas, está muy buena, por favor no la botes :D
it's a very good fanfic I hope to read more, pd: the author should delete the bad reviews, those guys I don't think they have read beyond chapter 1.
This is my opinion and I do not plan to insult or offend anyone. Honestly this is garbage at best, honestly I'm currently on chapter 105 and 90% of it is the same as the original novel. Now you might be wondering, 90%? Yes, and that's stretching a large part. The only changes are that some events happened earlier, like the trip to the elven tribe or Leon taking care of Zola and the group from the women's forest. The only changes that are "original to the author" are that the MC has a second, "more assertive" personality, until chapter 30 where they mix and Leon returns to being the typical loser Japanese MC. The last 3 changes are that the MC now has more AI to help him (which did not contribute anything new), Leon's better relationship with his family and finally Leon prevents Clarisse from buying a slave and losing her virginity.
Muy malo en general, los capítulos no son tan largos pero tiran más para cortos. No tiene nada de entretenida la verdad y para tratarse de mobuseka es raro decirle aburrido
I loved the uniqueness of your fic. I've never seen this type of character trope used in this type of fic.
I quite enjoyed it the author did a good job with keeping the vibes of the original while fixing some of the irritating aspect of it. The world is quite consistent.although the author's comedy is not to my personal liking i appreciate the work he put in.