Travelling through worlds with developer tools.

Travelling through worlds with developer tools.

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Author: Jaedyn_Jasmara
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Heath Dollen was a man in his 40s who lived in a suburban complex in Lund, Sweden. He was lonely and spent most of his days tending to himself after gaining osteoarthritis and uncontrolled refractive errors that sometimes led to his vision blurring, due to his bad habit of spending too long sitting in his vehicle and not exercising enough.



Heath had travelled throughout Europe and Asia, painting and writing avidly about his experiences. When he is not in his apartment, he does his best to give warmth to others around him, helping people around his neighbourhood, aiding in light labour, cleaning the environment, and donating much of his money to people he verified that required it.



Heath saw the downtrodden teen Elias drop his phone on accident from the other side of the street. To help, he thought of buying a new phone for this young man. He introduced himself and after gaining their trust, Heath and Elias became good friends and Heath was even nicknamed 'uncle.' There, he was introduced to many games, specifically sandbox games.



Heath heard of Games like Minecraft and Roblox, but after being introduced to 7 Days to Die, Cities: Skylines, Dwarf Fortress, Enshrouded, Going Medieval, Valheim, Project Zomboid, Rimworld, Vintage Story and more. Heath became an avid gamer while also gaining strength by replacing some of his joints with prosthetics and managing his exercises and diet.



It was slow progress, but his life became more fulfilling than ever. Now he had a family to look forward to! But at one point, while Elias was helping with Heath's troubles, he spotted a man who appeared lost, walking across the street in traffic, yet was somehow never hit. Heath said aloud that they should be careful there and asked if they needed assistance.



The man, that 'thing', turned to him. Now walking towards Heath robotically, yet avoiding the vehicles like a phantom, they soon came upon him. Once close enough, its features were noticed: a beautiful yet uncanny androgynous face, eyes that appeared too clear and glassy, and skin that was too perfect with no features of wrinkles or pores and no hair throughout.



A voice that sounded harmonic with the world spoke, yet their mouth never moved.

"Perfect." A melodic sound, one expected for a tenor, it captivated Heath but simultaneously scared those around him, then. . .

Suddenly, Heath blacked out. Hearing the cry of Elias for him. He left this world.

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YungMastuh
YungMastuh

Alright, I'm going to give it to you straight. Your novel has potential, but it is rather confusing. Having 2 characters speak in the same paragraph does not help the reader differentiate who's saying what until after the fact. There's also the fact that little is known about where he is, I'm guessing probably Marvel, but I'm unsure. One last thing, the numbers. Jesus

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VectorKVisemen
VectorKVisemen

It’s Gr8

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