Adam the Unbreakable

This story has an interesting premise, and based on what I've read, there is great potential. I only recommend the author go through the story with a grammar checker (there are many punctuation and spelling errors) and the story will be quite good.

Alright, here's the thing, I can see the authors intent in making the book and I think its a good book for his first time. The writing is good and somethings aren't badly portrayed... but, the pacing is too fast. The first chapter is the length of a normal one but so much happened in it. A tip for the author: try to show more details in your scenes, your first chapter alone could've been 3 or 4 chapters had you written it right. One for the MC growing, another for the encounter with the people and the 3rd or 4th for him leaving, getting the horse and training it. if you're wondering how that could've been done, then it's simple: Show more emotions, more reactions, what goes on when you timeskipped, why the characters do what they do and how did some stuff develop(like money appearing in his pocket). I think the author still has a lot to learn but is going strong for someone who is new. Keep developing and keep it up. Otherwise, this is such a bad book