AN - So I am one of the many that grew up with this series and still read the spin off's because of that, I wanted to do my own fanfic of it with a small time system that can only keep track of your abilities and make it so you can't just unlearn things over time or damage your foundation over time, keep track of skills and their capabilities and masteries, That's all I wanted to say here's the Sypnosis.
Daniel Sheppard was 19 when he was in the accident when he opened his eyes he was surrounded by darkness with a small screen illuminated in front of him, On the screen was the line.
"You have 3 wishes left, And your Reincarnation and body creation are complementary"
So i have read up till the current chp (that is chp 5) A bit of spoiler in here So after reading i thingk that the writing quality is not bad. This novel i part fanfic and part aufic because there is some elements that was changed from the original series. Our mc is percy's older brother and unlike percy his abillity is more of an water elemental. His special abillity that tells him apart from other poseidon kids is that he can change his body into water (water body), he also have a system, and an unlimited growth in skill as long as he work hard. The reason i say its part aufic is because the fact that mc body can hide demigods scent from monster cause their mother to not marry thhat f4cking pig of a father gabriel( am i right in his name?), Mc also teaches percy how to train his body and mind, control water, and breath in water. The few other reason for i say this is aufic was that percy and mc mother was ALLOWED inside camp halfblood where usually one could enter only if he/she is a demigod, a god, and those who are given access. Oh yeah theres 2 major plothole that i manage to found that is if mc hides demigods scent why percy can still see monsters when the monster have no reason to show their true faces in public? Remember that the reason percy can see monster in his childhood is because they interact directly with percy in a hostile maner if not percy wont be able to see the as how tyson did. So percy should have been really shocked when chiron comes to their home and tells them the they were the sons of god . And then how could poseidon and his sons still get blamed as the lightning thief if mc bloodline hides their demigods status? There is hades kids, nico and his sister that managed to get off the radar from the great calamity prophecy by entering the hades casino where aging stop. (So you know that the great calamity prophecy is like 100x more important than the lightning thief problem) plus how the heck grover and chiron know that mc and percy is a half blood when their scent is gone? Because they are not confronted with monsters, they will never change schools and also means that they will never meet grover.
MC is too op, and why does he use a sword? I was really hoping for him to use a Trident, he is the son of Poseidon after all and I am tired of MCs always using swords. The system is too op too, it was said to just use it for keeping track of growth but it's not different than the average op system where you can buy whatever you want :/
The gods are some people you don't mess with period... Unless who goes stealing from them every time 0.0 Any way first adventure go this is a toughie due to Author paving his way and that commendable! Love how MC has a love intrest and how he was a good bro to all. Sorta thinking Zues daughter got a challenge to fight now instead of orig MC. Keep strolling to this endless world of myth and legend till you find what you truly seek!
Author just kind of quit i recommend people stay away from this novel due to it being a shiny peice of grabage shiny yes possibly good yes but still garbage unless your a novel dumpster diver.
The story is really good man continue with its and do not drop it please the story is really good and how it develop and how shawn is show that it potential to reach its father or ever more powerful than him.
I really like the way the story is progressing and its interesting thought the novel is a bit slow I mean the chapter realise rate but that's impossible to fix cause author need to to rest its unhealthy to stay awake for so long you might get sick if you get sick we won't get chapters
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For now it looks very interesting hopefully not fall would appreciate if you could lower the speed with which the story is flowing and focus more on the development of the story.
This a very good history that this have a mc with a good development in relation with the curse of event !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!#%
It’s good so far 😺
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Oh my ghaddd i cant believe someones writting a story about greek gods so excited hehehe please dont drop beshshhshdbeudhskwixbxbisbs she xuxbbsj. Shxbsjx ejxjs xja djbs
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There are some minute errors but overall the story is great. The author shows a different take on the original story albeit some events from the cannon are inevitable like Camp Half-Blood. The author has already shown great changes from the start so it's probably not going to follow the cannon, hopefully. So the overarching idea is that I have high hopes for this interesting story and I want to wish the author good luck and pleasant writing. Keep it up.