The story as of now is going good. Nagulan's death bed makes it interesting. In the start it was kind of boring and it felt like a usual king story but now it has taken a different path with twists and turns. Checking it regularly for a I testing episode. Keep in writing with suspense which makes a reader jump to their feet.The good always faces the struggle but wins at the end is a concept from olden days and writing a story with still an olden concept may be boring a little but the way you represent it makes it interesting. We never forget the king stories which we learnt in our childhood and this is such a story
6 years ago
2
Kaavya_Velavan
Aadhirai's whereabouts was in agacharim but shinra didn't know about it. The thought of hiding her there was a great idea but why did she move from there to the forest and how come a 1 and half year child plays in the forest. Though he is matured enough to play alone aadhirai leaves him alone. That was not what everyone thinks but still he is active and mature than other children explains it. He has a born talent there to start with and twists are running good.
6 years ago
1
Kaavya_Velavan
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6 years ago
1
Limpsy
Overall the story is going great and it takes us to the olden era where there were kings who really took care of the kingdom and people. The kings who was supposed to do it were not doing it other countries. Those types kings need to be punished. They are allowed to go free but still from this good king point of view whatever he is doing his great. The king shouldn't die soon and take care of his country.
6 years ago
1
Dharu_Raj
Good going but explain the characters well. The way you see the characters need to be seen by others and the same goes to the location. Explain the details of the location and characters. Developing the story is good and the content selection is also good
6 years ago
1
Hu_Murphy
Hey there!
Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact avarohm_review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
The story as of now is going good. Nagulan's death bed makes it interesting. In the start it was kind of boring and it felt like a usual king story but now it has taken a different path with twists and turns. Checking it regularly for a I testing episode. Keep in writing with suspense which makes a reader jump to their feet.The good always faces the struggle but wins at the end is a concept from olden days and writing a story with still an olden concept may be boring a little but the way you represent it makes it interesting. We never forget the king stories which we learnt in our childhood and this is such a story
Aadhirai's whereabouts was in agacharim but shinra didn't know about it. The thought of hiding her there was a great idea but why did she move from there to the forest and how come a 1 and half year child plays in the forest. Though he is matured enough to play alone aadhirai leaves him alone. That was not what everyone thinks but still he is active and mature than other children explains it. He has a born talent there to start with and twists are running good.
Reveal Spoiler
Overall the story is going great and it takes us to the olden era where there were kings who really took care of the kingdom and people. The kings who was supposed to do it were not doing it other countries. Those types kings need to be punished. They are allowed to go free but still from this good king point of view whatever he is doing his great. The king shouldn't die soon and take care of his country.
Good going but explain the characters well. The way you see the characters need to be seen by others and the same goes to the location. Explain the details of the location and characters. Developing the story is good and the content selection is also good
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact avarohm_review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.