Great book so far definitely recommend. If you watched Naruto then you understand if not then that’s your loss. But anyways I really like this book y’all should definitely read.
5 years ago
7
Mirmirb1
Stop reading this start reading the book go try it out rate the chapter and give spirit stones🥰😍🥰😍🍥🍥🍥🍥🍥👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
5 years ago
5
Schnee_
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5 years ago
3
Mirmirb1
This my first book and it’s not as easy as look I wrote like a lot of words and apparently it was only 15 pages like dang but yeah check it out and support and give suggestions
5 years ago
3
Poke_verse
I've only read up to the 1st chapter. From what I read so far it should be a good book. Anyway, 5 stars from me, read on if you wanna.
4 years ago
2
SUBSCRIBE_MY_LIST
The author of this story is new to writing. I can only deduce that he is also very very young.
The grammar in this story, lack of punctuation, walls of text and chaotic writing is worse than the majority of authors who get their fic dropped due to the terrible formatting and grammar they used.
Which is why I drop it as well.
The story simply isn't legible with the complete lack of formatting, grammar and paragraphs.
I unfortunately cannot accurately rate the quality of the story because I simply could not read it due to how it was written...
To the author... I encourage you to keep on writing but do so to work on these issues. Writing out your stories is a great way to practice your writing skills but you do need to do your best to format your text as you write it.
Each sentence should end with a symbol. Question marks for questions, exclamation marks for yelling, points... For breaks and a single point to end a sentence.
Don't group more than three sentences in a single paragraph. If you do, your text is not legible to people with dyslexia.
Don't shorten your words to slang like sum for something. Very few people outside the sphere of influence that you are in will make such a connection.
Storytelling / Writing is an international. It pans across generations. As such it pays to put the effort into making it legible for all.
I'm a millennial, your probably one of the next gen kids judging by how you use your words: work this and your story will be lit.
Sincerely,
Canaan
5 years ago
2
LokiMaster
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5 years ago
2
katorishi
the chapters are short grammar alright. the gems of this story are story and interactions. I would like to tell the author please use " when a character is talking, other than that even though you have a good story I like it.😉😊
5 years ago
2
N0_Hope
It was starting as a good story but the thing is that:
*There are no space between lines
*Too fast of a conversation in which I don't know if it's naruto talking or another person
* First thing MC did was quite rushed .
I quit to read any more of this novel
Hurm, it have a good concept... Not something rare but enough to be uncommon.
I think the part you can fix immediately is the paragraph. You could cut it into more paragraph so people wouldn't have to read a whole page of compact text that will make reader unconsciously feel like it's too much text and a bit messy.
Then you should also let it 'breath'. When I read your fanfiction, it's like I need one breath to read everything in one go or something will lose...
You can also use symbols more. Separate the speech from other sentence so it give us a feeling of its a dialogue instead of another normal sentence...
Great book so far definitely recommend. If you watched Naruto then you understand if not then that’s your loss. But anyways I really like this book y’all should definitely read.
Stop reading this start reading the book go try it out rate the chapter and give spirit stones🥰😍🥰😍🍥🍥🍥🍥🍥👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
Reveal Spoiler
This my first book and it’s not as easy as look I wrote like a lot of words and apparently it was only 15 pages like dang but yeah check it out and support and give suggestions
I've only read up to the 1st chapter. From what I read so far it should be a good book. Anyway, 5 stars from me, read on if you wanna.
The author of this story is new to writing. I can only deduce that he is also very very young. The grammar in this story, lack of punctuation, walls of text and chaotic writing is worse than the majority of authors who get their fic dropped due to the terrible formatting and grammar they used. Which is why I drop it as well. The story simply isn't legible with the complete lack of formatting, grammar and paragraphs. I unfortunately cannot accurately rate the quality of the story because I simply could not read it due to how it was written... To the author... I encourage you to keep on writing but do so to work on these issues. Writing out your stories is a great way to practice your writing skills but you do need to do your best to format your text as you write it. Each sentence should end with a symbol. Question marks for questions, exclamation marks for yelling, points... For breaks and a single point to end a sentence. Don't group more than three sentences in a single paragraph. If you do, your text is not legible to people with dyslexia. Don't shorten your words to slang like sum for something. Very few people outside the sphere of influence that you are in will make such a connection. Storytelling / Writing is an international. It pans across generations. As such it pays to put the effort into making it legible for all. I'm a millennial, your probably one of the next gen kids judging by how you use your words: work this and your story will be lit. Sincerely, Canaan
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the chapters are short grammar alright. the gems of this story are story and interactions. I would like to tell the author please use " when a character is talking, other than that even though you have a good story I like it.😉😊
It was starting as a good story but the thing is that: *There are no space between lines *Too fast of a conversation in which I don't know if it's naruto talking or another person * First thing MC did was quite rushed . I quit to read any more of this novel
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Hurm, it have a good concept... Not something rare but enough to be uncommon. I think the part you can fix immediately is the paragraph. You could cut it into more paragraph so people wouldn't have to read a whole page of compact text that will make reader unconsciously feel like it's too much text and a bit messy. Then you should also let it 'breath'. When I read your fanfiction, it's like I need one breath to read everything in one go or something will lose... You can also use symbols more. Separate the speech from other sentence so it give us a feeling of its a dialogue instead of another normal sentence...