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Hi! Author here leaving an honest review. I want to improve my writing because I knew this is mediocre and I want to make it better. I use too much exposition and find that I can’t write good conversations. there will probably be a lot of inconsistencies because as much as I try to note down all of the information that I use (seriously I have like 16 pages of notes for like the first 30-40 chapters) I will inevitably forget something. Pls give your suggestions on how I should improve, I take criticism well so do your worst. (P.S I will write a chapter ever 1-2 weeks and I should have around 2k words per chapter, no promises to either of those though *teehee*)

Full support. Please more author. More more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more!!

I have no clue what I'm reading 90% of the time. you seem to be trying so hard to make this seem like an original story.... but it's a fan fic, simple as that, so making it so confusing and convoluted. no need for some overly complex grand design. 22 chapters in and the story has barley anything to do with douluo. of your going to make a douluo fanfic then do that. this isn't your original world stop making it so complex as if this was an original story. ruins the whole purpose of it being a fanfic. otherwise take out the douluo stuff, and make an original world and sick with it, or get rid of the weird af system and multiple reincarnators and trial candidates or what ever the heck is going on here. it just doesn't work. fanfics are ment to use original works and twist it around, while your trying to make an original work and add other non original stuff into it.

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Full support and more chapters please....Nayssuuuuuuuuu.MoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMoreMore

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