The crown princess of the kingdom of Astrae is known to be a wayward being the only successor to the throne, but behind that hardheaded and rebellious image is a sweet and caring lady who only wanted to acquire peace during her reign.
Peace to end the feud between her kingdom and their neighboring kingdom whom they are on par with on almost every aspect is an idealistic vision that would be soon discouraged by everyone around her. In face of discouragement from her own people, the resolute heiress of Astrae will find comfort to an ally who no one would have expected. The princess who reflects the crystal elegance, cold touch and sharp spikes of valor of her kingdom and the swift, bright ally who supports her vision of peace, an alliance no one has foreseen.
Together they will protect the secrets buried for thousands of millennia and fix the conflicts of the past for a better future.
So I finished chapters prologue to the end of 3, and I think you should provide more details in regards to the first person perspective as well as the pacing of details. Too much at once could be forceful, and that's something to research and improve on for future writing. Looking at your later chapters the writing has already improved significantly, so I recommend taking some time to edit and polish your earlier chapters to draw in more readers. Everything else seems fine, but again some of the interactions with family could be polished more. Anyways great work.
This first person perspective of the MC is good. And the story development has a good pacing. The problem here though, is that same first person perspective. This had restricted our overview of the world and had limited the character development of the supporting characters. Nonetheless you would get charmed by the thoughts of the MC. It has a good potential for a larger world-building scenario.
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