Good story so far. It has some key features, but by the story came so far I can think what would be the end. Even though this might be a personal preference, but i think it will be great if the ending wasnt expected by the reader. But its just one idea. I dont have much experience in writing. So keep up the good work. Looking foward to read the full story.
4 years ago
1
ZOA
The author did an excellent job in describing the scenes and all. The story title is quite hooking. Keep on writing and I think you will improve quite fast as your story has the potential and a really good plot.
Great job author!!!
4 years ago
1
Clown_15
It's really good so far. I don't usually read but this is really interesting in my opinion and has a good story. Overall it's just really well made.
4 years ago
1
RD_Hughes
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4 years ago
1
YouthGod
This story have a great potential. hehe, just me imagine that if I'm about to die in 3 months, what would I do?
Though, I'm lucky I have my family if that ever happen lol.
So yeah, the story is great, the chappy is short though. and maybe add more details that's all! Happy writing author and Goodluck!
4 years ago
1
Pixie_Auri
The story has a nice premise, the main character is well established and relatable. There are a few flow issues, especially with the internal dialogues, but if you push through the book becomes quite interesting.
4 years ago
1
SomeoneBad
A great premise building immediate tension in the early chapters with the 3 months. This story explores the mind space of someone with limited time. The use of punctuation and flow of sentences could be improved with time and more practice, but the characters that are integral to stories like this are all built up nicely in the early stages.
There may be a sense of over-description at times, though it only provides more details into both the environment and the mental of the main character.
Speaking of the main character, the vibrant yet lightly erratic thoughts and conversation with self is something I actually related to way too hard with.....
Good story so far. It has some key features, but by the story came so far I can think what would be the end. Even though this might be a personal preference, but i think it will be great if the ending wasnt expected by the reader. But its just one idea. I dont have much experience in writing. So keep up the good work. Looking foward to read the full story.
The author did an excellent job in describing the scenes and all. The story title is quite hooking. Keep on writing and I think you will improve quite fast as your story has the potential and a really good plot. Great job author!!!
It's really good so far. I don't usually read but this is really interesting in my opinion and has a good story. Overall it's just really well made.
Reveal Spoiler
This story have a great potential. hehe, just me imagine that if I'm about to die in 3 months, what would I do? Though, I'm lucky I have my family if that ever happen lol. So yeah, the story is great, the chappy is short though. and maybe add more details that's all! Happy writing author and Goodluck!
The story has a nice premise, the main character is well established and relatable. There are a few flow issues, especially with the internal dialogues, but if you push through the book becomes quite interesting.
A great premise building immediate tension in the early chapters with the 3 months. This story explores the mind space of someone with limited time. The use of punctuation and flow of sentences could be improved with time and more practice, but the characters that are integral to stories like this are all built up nicely in the early stages. There may be a sense of over-description at times, though it only provides more details into both the environment and the mental of the main character. Speaking of the main character, the vibrant yet lightly erratic thoughts and conversation with self is something I actually related to way too hard with.....