DC: The Astrea

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I would like to present to you some female characters from the dc universe and if there are any recurring female characters that you have chosen, I apologize. A female character in the DC universe that I would like to propose to. linda park deedee marcy graves catwoman huntress batgirl supergirl powergirl galatea circe ivy harley lois paran hawkgirl giganta emerald empress saturn girl tala starsaphire volcana queenbee(young justice) livewire killerfrost cheetah zatanna wonderwoman stargirl vixen blackcanary ms.martian(young justice) artemis(young justice) starfire blackfire terra raven jinx rose superwoman cheshire(young justice) audrey talia maxima Darci Mason Roulette Morgaine le Fey

Not bad, but the updates are 1500 or so words a month.... So this makes me hesitate whether to read this or not. So one can say that there is almost no progress. [img=exp]

awesome FANFICTION comrade looking forward to more chapters.🥇🏆👍👌😁😎🥇🏆👍👌😁😎🥇🏆👍👌😁😎🥇🏆👍👌😁😎🥇🏆👍👌😁😎🥇🏆👍👌😁😎🥇🏆👍👌😁😎

Конечно еще рант об этом говорить, но похоже на начало довольно хорошей истории. Есть парочка минусов с которыми надеюсь автор вскоре сможет справиться. Во многих произвведениях именно так, но это не значит, что это хорошо. А именно отсутствие диалогов. Диалоги как по мне очень важны и раскрывают ваших персонажей намного лучше чем просто описание как бы со стороны. Поэтому прошу больше диалогов и большую дитализацию разных сцен и персонажей. Не стесняйтесь описывать чувства персонажей, их действия и желания. Спасипо автору.

The grammar, spelling, and syntax have some errors here in there. None of it is bad and is very easy to understand. Updates do occur but not in great number so it becomes something just to check on every so often. The story has a terrible time with pacing. His company development etc happens way to fast and powers gained way to quickly. There needs to be some sort of explanation about his powers because it’s very confusing. Basically just gets what he wants??? All the characters are basic personalities and don’t seem to have much… for now (read all as of Aug 28, 2022). While we all know the world he is in, it doesn’t not to any degree go into any detail about the environment. It just feels like it was rushed and could definitely have more added in to fill in parts. Author should definitely continue but update and add on to previous chapters to make improvements.

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this is good.....why dont you make a marvel fanfic and the mc is son of odin his powers will be Od Laguna like this one?...well dont take it seriously if your busy....

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