Im the only Player in DC

my guy ... you ... are ... using ... too ... many ... triple ... dots ... randomly... and .... it ... makes ... it ... impossible ... to ... read ... ... .. .. ... ...

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nothing new, it's the typical gamer fanfic, the MC is reckless and stupid, just reading this makes me want to kill myself, ok no, but this is so boring and stupid

it has potential to be a good fanfic but sadly in my own opinion...it literally same things with other "gamers" fanfic which is bland.......

Nothing great here had potential but the author pretty much ran in to the trash buy putting in am arbitrary garbage system. That's some real low effort, with the gamer system he can already become string but do to lack of imagination and skills gacha was added so powers can be inserted low effort plot. Onto of misspelling and bad grammar you be better off dripping lemon juice in your eyes than reading this, as it would be more stimulating than this 💩.

I don't understand how people can even read this I'm sorry. Even the first paragraph of the story has multiple errors in it. Half the time, the grammar doesn't make any sense. How am I supposed to follow the story when the sentences look like this "Wade go store... see man bread cried... He did but speaked to him from shoe... Big one." This is no exaggeration, that's literally the sentence structure for half the sentences in this book. It's insane to me how this is somehow topping the charts.

Cool I think you have done a great job at the story keep doing what you you do dude and don't let anyone discourage you, if YOU like it then do it DO NOT care if someone criticise your story and only learn from your mistakes, to me it's pretty good so good job pal.

soooo bad. Author does not know math. For him 10% means 10x.... and for a system novel math is important. Plus.... stop.... putting..... soooo... manny ......dots

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I loved the story, keep writing/I loved the story, keep writing/I loved the story, keep writing/I loved the story, keep writing/I loved the story, keep writing

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Sinceramente, eu gostei da história e consegui me adaptar a escrita ruim. (Depois de ler muitas histórias xinxia, eu me acostumei com escrita ruim)

Werry well Sans is pleased by jour work