Hello, this is my first Fanfiction! I was very bored and have never done this so thank you so much for reading, and let me know what you like and dislike! Thank you for your time!
3 years ago
3
Kirito_Link
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3 years ago
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SatoruGojo_
The reason I'm giving this a such low review is that everything is so simple and underdeveloped. The MC is op which is fine but the way you write him. He seems kinda single-sided. The storyline with Rumi needs to be developed more because even though they are soulmates they still need a more detailed love story. The writing quality is really simple, but it's your first fanfic so I can't blame you. I know that's it is hard to write them but just try to make the story feel real. The character design needs work to because Rumi seems like a simpleminded character.
Hello, this is my first Fanfiction! I was very bored and have never done this so thank you so much for reading, and let me know what you like and dislike! Thank you for your time!
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The reason I'm giving this a such low review is that everything is so simple and underdeveloped. The MC is op which is fine but the way you write him. He seems kinda single-sided. The storyline with Rumi needs to be developed more because even though they are soulmates they still need a more detailed love story. The writing quality is really simple, but it's your first fanfic so I can't blame you. I know that's it is hard to write them but just try to make the story feel real. The character design needs work to because Rumi seems like a simpleminded character.