A Torrid Hero

Grammar is ok. The pov should be stated otherwise I have no clue who's talking ( Simply it's hard to distinguish). the initial idea was somewhat interesting but it went downhill the further I read. Mc has no sort of background or reason for his choices. and his ultimate goal it to get enough money( boring) in the way he goes about it. you mention the void and the someone what powers he getting then boom it disappears at least I would've taught his quirk would've been something related to it but Nah. His emotions are barely there yet none of this is reflected in his character interaction with the environment or the people he still acts like a normal person. more so of a child than an adult. The Mc goes for some what smart to an idiot as the story progresses. All in all, as your first work it has a lot of room for improvement. It's not the worst I've read but it's not the best out there.