One Piece: Adventure of Leo

well as author I am going give my fanfic 5 stars shamelessly and I am newbie Author and it's my first time writing a fanfic, so please point out mistake i make thank you for reading this

well a good fanfiction‌, but it has a rocky start other than good work author😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌

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Author focus too much on the system and not the story. Until chapter 50 barely anything happened... Every single chapter is about the system. The writing is not tts friendly too...

3/5 (Dropped at Ch 35) Obvious issues with grammar but author mentioned that and made a clear effort so it's fine, great start and potential based on Devil Fruit selection and future possibilities due to that. To much reliance on system for the story, lots of info dumping on system functions and grants to many boons. Systems are great for fics but putting everything on a silver platter can affect the story progression and the growth of your character, same as having to many functions ex. the crew cards. Lastly, and reason for dropping, presence of other reincarnator (Rindou food wars) as well as Multiverse items (Pokeball), the Black Pearl worked due to its functionality in the world environment but anything else is abit to much. Overall it is a decent fic, if you have no issues with what I mentioned I recommend you give it a try.

The novel is okay so far (Chapter10). It would be 1.000 times better if it wasn't for the 300-500 word chapters. The character design is great (5 stars), world background seems good (4 stars) but there is not enough story yet to be sure, the only thing that brings it down is that the chapters are so short that the setup for the story is going to take at least 15 chapters and the updates aren't frequent enough to counter balance the small size of the chapters.

the first 15 chapters were good but I don't like where the story is going it seems like he will just recruit the strawhats and it just not for me i like one piece story in which the mc has a life not intertwined with cannon, yes they will interact but not so much that this kind of interaction is kind of ruin the story for me.

- Writing Quality------------✪✪✪XX - need more work and pls increase your word count. - Stability of Update--------✪✪✪✪✪ - Story Development-------✪✪XXX - 14chs so far and we have nothing. 90% system info.(self estimate) and 10% story. - Character Design---------✪✪✪✪✪ - World Background-------✪✪✪✪✪

MCs DF is not goro goro no mi, like 98% of fanfics. MCs DF is an ancient Zoan (and hopefully stays that way instead of him getting two due to some unlikely non-canon BS).

The story is amazing, the character development too, the writing quality is good and i would like the love interest to be Robin. ......................... ...........................................................

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Some very nice ideas, but sadly the writing style and grammar are awful... I'd like to give it another try if this gets edited, but right now it is just not a very pleasant read. Sorry author and good luck training your writing skills! [img=recommend]

This was a really good story that used to be updated pretty regularly, but now that we haven't had a new chapter in close to a month I assume the author's dropped it. Not that surprising honestly, but still a shame for such a fun story. No point in reading an incomplete story with no hopes of it being resumed so 2 stars for that