Lightning in a clear sky
Author: Esmoriz
4.18
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A young man is transported to another world, where he must use war tactics and charm to help the little town of Termapos grow and gain independence from his king.
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It is very interesting for the most part its just that I would of liked the chapter to end in a more interesting way, on the other hand there is a characters name which is a little complicated in which the name is Patroclis it sounds good because of the era in the chapter but it is still a little wired, because on my part I had to try and say it a few times to underattended but that would be about all everything else is perfect.
The story starts good but it needs more chapters, for now, it's a 3.8 for me but it might get better or worst ill be waiting for the next chapter.
The character need more descriptions like how they look and how they react to things for exaple he is tall with muscles or short. Am here to see if this goes anywhere.
Its a really great story, I need more releases really good work by the author, loving the story and cant wait to see what happens next!!!!!!!
I see that you might be new here but you should read other stories to see how they develop their characters and get a good idea. Sorry about my bad english but i hope that this review helps you, its a good concept you just need more time to decelop for now the story is a 3 for me
It's ok, not good but ok you can do better. be better I'll be your sensei. nah work on your writing as the other guys said and I don't know how this is not higher on this page you have a good start.
Am the author and i just want to say that am really happy that people are reading my book if anyone of you have any feed back feel free to leave it as a review. Thank you.
You should work on your writing, it needs a little bit of work. The story its ok but you only have two chapters as of now. Thats my feedback.
The story and characters both are interesting. I read few chapters and I am looking forward to read more chapters in the future. One thing I felt is that the synopsis is a bit short. Keep up the good work author 👍
It's getting better keep it up. some spelling mistakes but not that noticeable. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
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