* Bang bang* The deafen sound of gun shots rang in the air. A girl holding a gun pointing towards a fat middle aged man with tattoos all over his body.
" It's better for you die." The girl spit does cold words to the man who slumped and fell to ground.
" Zacky!" A man shouted from behind, making the girl to turn around.
...
A man was standing behind the girl as he looked at the other man in front of her.
" Who is this?" The other man asked.
" Oh." The girl muttered as she grinned. " He is my personal bodygaurd.
I'm not very much into romance but that's just me. It also needs more detail. Everything goes by too quickly and I can't comprehend what's going on. Otherwise a very good read!
hmmm very interesting concept, I like where this is going. All I can say is keep it up. I'd really like to see more of this because this is pretty cool. Really looking forward to more. Your descriptiveness is also really captivating, and your grammar is pretty good. I'll rate this a 5.0
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Okay, let's see, I read through it and caught up quite quickly since the chapters weren't too long. The story doesn't have a 5/5 rating from me since I noticed a lot of grammar mistakes and typos, not any usage of unique words, even though she was explaining from the Author's Narrative, also using the word "Mum" seemed a bit too unprofessional. Though, the story was pretty fast-paced which is what readers like, Just the two first chaps alone moved like from 1 to 50. Like in the first chapter she got an order to save someone who's been kidnapped and boom step-sister in the next chapter. Overall it was a good read, I recommend reading it!!
Good story idea, nice plot. The story development is slow but that's not too big of an issue. It's a good story. The grammatical errors should be fixed tho. it's not much but it would greatly improve the quality of the novel.
This novel is interesting. The writing quality could improve but it doesn’t bother me too much. The story development hasn’t really gone anywhere as of yet but it’s only been six chapters. The character design is interesting, the world building isn’t different but that’s because it’s the real world. Overall this book has room for improvement and I’d suggest grammerly for little mistakes though it’s a very good read😊
Ahhh! I am out of words. This is perfection, just perfection. This the first time I have ever read a female lead novel novel, and I will have to say that I don’ regret it! Congratulations! Your novel just toke the place of my second most favorite novels. Still not the first one, nobody can have that place
Let's start with the writing quality. It definitely has room for improvement but it's understandable. As for the story development, I'm not sure yet. The character design, however, is great. Overall, it's a good read! I recommend this novel
A nice story plot author, really commendable.