What would you do if you were transported into the world of Remnant with creatures of Grimm made of peoples nightmares coming to life and slowly taking over. What would happen if a shard of a soul was guided into this world would he be kind, trusting or would he turn and manipulate everyone.

This is my first time writing so be patient and please help.

I have also posted this story on Wattpad and Royal Road.

The hidden Secrets (Rwby fanfic)

ACTION

ROMANCE

ADVENTURE

REINCARNATION

COMEDY

WEAKTOSTRONG

DARK

SUPERPOWERS

NO-HAREM

RWBY

I get it you're new to writing stories but you gotta fix it i mean its all over the place the story is quite chaotic and full of cuts like come on.

the guy is bleeding then what did he do he goes to the library saying he knows what he's doing,
then suddenly he's at the mall with stealing with his inventory like when did he have that?! and somehow he outrun trained huntsman which reminds you they are fast as hell while being in a body of a kid and injured.
then next he's at juniors with the twins? like come on man

not trying to bash or anything im just saying so you could write better you need to give people the details and story progression not full of cuts like that. you may have the story clear in your head but not to us readers