OMNITRIX (DC)

I read until chapter 4 so, if this is some type of masterpiece after those 4 chapters, you guys can only suffer to find out, I couldn't. The main problem with this is frustration. The MC is stupid, so you get frustrated with his thought process. When I saw that it was someone with the omnitrix in DC, I was actually hoping for that person to use his watch to improve all the aspects of his life. With certain aliens, he can become a millionaire in a few days, but from what I see the MC is just like Ben, only using the watch to fight his episodic enemies with no 'life' between the fights...

Am I allowed to do this? Its been a while since I posted this fic, and I almost forgot to do this tradition. Well, here we are.

better then some of the omnitrix in dc i have read, tho it still falls for the same problem all of them have, introducing the omnitrix. they would not have any aliens stored inside unless this is a crossover in which case MC wouldn't get it unless it was a dark AU crossover. the rest were just minor issues this early in the story. it would have been better if MC built it and at the beginning he added dna to transform 1 at the start and upgrades the watch to hold more as the story goes. (which no other omnitrix story does from what i have seen) and the biggest problem i have with fics that do this is how to explain your power without breaking the 4th wall and lowering the quality of a fic.

my honest opinion, the writing is good, and such, but it's pure nonsense, learning the dream. omnitrix on dc, dumber than a jock. forget things easily. he could get rich and face whoever he wants, but do what is a young justice fanboy

best crossover between Ben 10 and dc I in joy this fic thank you

stupid mc that did not use his brain to think...

Writing quality is good, but story progress is soooooo boooooring I wanna sleep [img=sad]

I've read a whole lot of quotes on quotes bad books but this takes it man like the MC is so stupid and how he uses the Omnitrix in such a bad way that physically hurts me quality to this book is that one of the books that has few grammar mistakes

Good writing quality but terrible story development and character design. The plot is forced and the MC is stupid. He uses the Omnitrix only to fight, not improve his life. He could easily make money with some of the aliens, yet doesn't.

Um enredo completamente sem graça. A personalidade do personagem principal é mal trabalhada. Não estou dizendo que é ruim. É terrívelmente mediano, apenas.

the storyline is just all over the place. It got boring fast. I could care less on what the other characters do in their daily lives, but the MC is special, give him the screen time he deserves

good job great fanfiction................................................................................................. ............................

It seems okay as of now but the thing is MC needs to be a bit careful. It's too easy to associate all of his aliens with him (because of symbol of Omnitrix) and this is DC for God's sake. So he just can't change into a alien like that he did against trickster.

I made it chapter 45 before I could no longer continue, I give the story 1 star in everything because this app does not allow for 0 stars. The story is rushed, the english is barely legible, and the main character is mediocre. If you are looking for an Omnitrix story, look elsewhere.