A Different Kryptonian [Invincible/Brightburn] SI

Hey if you’re interested in reading this book I suggest you read the tags first. Lots of reviews are giving negative responses for petty reasons, none of which have anything to do with the quality of my writing nor have any form of professional criticism. If you want to read a book about an MC going all killer mode or grey then that’s fine. This app has plenty of those especially in the DC section.

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Omg I was just thinking of brightburn and how there is barley any fanfics about him. You sir have hooked me and I hope you finish this story so good luck.

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I'm not sure why this story has so many bad reviews for stupid reasons. I think people are just mad that because he transmigrated into Brightburn he should be evil. Which is silly. That's not a good enough reason to give a bad review. Review it based on what it is, not what you wanted it to be. Just look at the tags and see for yourself, it has no villain tag.

Me parece que la idea podría ser buena pero que ya el título se engañoso no me agrada para nada así que solo por que no puedo poner 0 estrellas se queda con 1 además el personaje ese no está ni cerca de llegar al poder de un kriptionano este tipo apenas y tira un edificio. Básicamente es un guionazo 🤮🙄[img=faceslap]

I had hope, but unfortunately, this is another boy scout mc, you are literally a villain (BB) why do you go on this savior BS route? at max you go anti-hero.

I’ve read the marvel book from this author and looked it so decided to give this one a chance and so far I’ve liked it. The writing style is different from his other book but overall I think it’s an improvement. The stories premise is also interesting and only have one complain… I NEED MORE CHAPTERS!

Since this one crossovers will have other characters like wonder woman and supergirl or just invencible characters? And who will be the MC harem? I hope atom eve is one of then since she's the best girl of invencible

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I really like the idea, the mix of universes seems fantastic. But something that happens in many Superman Fanfics and that I don't like is that they forget that Superman is more human than many, skipping school prevents his human development, dates, parties, all the problems of youth help him to be more human to Superman. If you just put him to training and training he is no different than a soldier or warrior. Anyway, I hope the story continues and shows us more of the common life of the MC.

This story is amazing man, im really enjoying it, Looking forward to seeing how this story develops........................................

Writing Quality: ★★☆☆☆ - The writing is functional but lacks polish, with repetitive excuses for the male protagonist's inexperience. This becomes frustrating, especially when he misses obvious opportunities to use his abilities effectively. For instance, during the battle with the giant snake, he could have easily won by targeting its weakness with heat vision or by lobotomizing it. These missed opportunities make the writing feel sloppy and unconvincing. Story Development: ★★☆☆☆ - The story suffers from inconsistent development, particularly due to the protagonist's poor decision-making in critical moments. The fight with Omni-Man is another example where he could have strategically used heat vision to incapacitate him and prevent the massacre of the Guardians of the Globe. These lapses in logic detract from the overall narrative, making it difficult to stay engaged. Character Design: ★★☆☆☆ - The protagonist's design is flawed, as his inexperience is used as an excuse for failing to make obvious, strategic decisions. This not only weakens his character but also undermines the story. The lack of growth or learning from these mistakes further hampers his development, making him feel static and underwhelming. Updating Stability: ★★★☆☆ - Updates are relatively consistent, but the quality varies. Some chapters are rushed, with the protagonist's strategic failings feeling like plot conveniences rather than genuine character flaws. This inconsistency affects the overall narrative coherence and the reader's investment in the story. World Background: ★★★☆☆ - The world-building is serviceable but lacks depth. While the setting provides enough context for the story to unfold, the failure to integrate important details—like how the protagonist could have used his environment or powers more effectively—prevents the world from feeling fully immersive.

Author it was okay not good not bad just okay first thing brandon has some fire abilities too along with his others second its just not very original you used man of steel ideas for most of the chapter and while Caitlin is intelligent no way in hell she made a holographic device the size of a necklace and then you killed of much of the guardians just for the plot point in the original atleast rhe guardians managed to injure nolan