With such a long chapter, I had high expectations, but it is a disappointment, it follows the canon to the letter, there are no variations apart from the fact that she is a woman, I expected something refreshing considering how long the chapter was, something like the first stages of the childhood showing us variations of what is known, I wouldn't mind if it were a mery sue, as long as something at least funny was done with it, but nothing, I don't mind the redundancy, only with a panel that shows statistics, If you fixed the writing so that it was at least understandable and it didn't seem like I was reading a child's diary, I'm sorry if the criticism is a little harsh, but I hope it gets better, I like it when people make stories, it doesn't matter if they're bad, At least they have the impulse to write, I tried because I thought I could do it better than many, but I only made about 2 chapters and I stopped, anyway, I'll come read it when I see the fanfic there, to see how it goes. Greetings and don't give up. (translate)
8 months ago
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Daoiste70QyP
It's too early to look into the plot yet, but it's well written. The heroine is ordinary. The system is much better than the usual one. Events are moving fast, but with the heat, the timescales should stop soon. New chapters are still being released frequently. Author, please continue.
With such a long chapter, I had high expectations, but it is a disappointment, it follows the canon to the letter, there are no variations apart from the fact that she is a woman, I expected something refreshing considering how long the chapter was, something like the first stages of the childhood showing us variations of what is known, I wouldn't mind if it were a mery sue, as long as something at least funny was done with it, but nothing, I don't mind the redundancy, only with a panel that shows statistics, If you fixed the writing so that it was at least understandable and it didn't seem like I was reading a child's diary, I'm sorry if the criticism is a little harsh, but I hope it gets better, I like it when people make stories, it doesn't matter if they're bad, At least they have the impulse to write, I tried because I thought I could do it better than many, but I only made about 2 chapters and I stopped, anyway, I'll come read it when I see the fanfic there, to see how it goes. Greetings and don't give up. (translate)
It's too early to look into the plot yet, but it's well written. The heroine is ordinary. The system is much better than the usual one. Events are moving fast, but with the heat, the timescales should stop soon. New chapters are still being released frequently. Author, please continue.
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