Naruto: AFK System

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The protagonist doesn't have an ambit8on to grow at all...

mc is boring, AFK ? nah, not AFK at all... and not only that but the story takes toooo slow.... like 20 ch and only 3 days... wth ? sorry, not my cup of tea.

the author is a sasuke fanatic and naruto hater. he thinks naruto is like a prince and presents him as a petty, jealous, spoiled prince. he dismisses naruto's bad childhood as meh, and thinks that it's actually good because he can pull pranks and not get badly punished or because he didn't get expelled from the academy even if he gets zero from tests. he fails to mention that naruto always gets hungry that he eats expired food and learned to fish in order to feed himself. no one also punishes misbehaving kids in konoha. choji and kiba also always get zero. in short author just hates naruto and is set on presenting him in a bad light.

-repetitive glaze - continuity error - no really afk

as of chapter 14 i like it but there's to much glazing damnit, i fear the glazing that will happen in the next chapters oh and the name of the system should've been changed to sign-in system but that's too little of an issue

its good read it id roccemend............

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This story gave me new perspective on various characters, there are some inconsistencies in the story but they are minor, overall excellent story. Translation quality improves as chapters go by and different perspective of author makes it a unique naruto fanfic, it is easily tops most naruto fanfics.

great job so far. nice translation job translator-san keep it up wordcountwordcountwordcountwordcountwordcountwordcountwordcountwordcountwordcountwordcount

I thought it was interesting at first, the way the MC wanted to distance himself from canon and trouble but eventually canon caught up with him. Sigh, what's the point of introducing an OC/SI/whatever if the story will mostly follow canon? That's just lazy writing imo. Better to read the manga or watch the anime at this point.

story has too make monologues, even after 30 chapters they are still in the wave arc, and most of the time its just saying the same thing about ANBU, Danzo, MC is a genius this genius that, like most of the paragraphs are the same thing just wrote differently, its annoying and boring and a waste of time

there's way too much glazing. glazing the mc, glazing Sasuke, glazing hashirama, etc. then, there's the repeated restating of the same thing in many different ways. there were like 2 entire chapters just talking about the water dragon bullet jutsu, in the middle of a fight! side characters keep getting their names changed. and these are just a few of the problems.

eh baru baca sampai chapter 2 sementara raring segini..dan kebetulan lihat beberapa komentar, mending namakan saja sistem pengangguran kelihatannya bagus. afk?? lucu bukan? ini transmigrasi bukan MC main game atau yang perlu keyboard.. aneh