I Reincarnated in Martial Peak

A re-write ? If so then i hope it's even better than the last one

An honest review (probably has a few writing mistakes, i'm super sleepy while writing this lol) ===== Writing quality: decent. it gives just enough immersion for the story to work. some word choices can make things a little confusing at times, though. [3/5] ===== Stability of updates: inconsistent but not bad. we usually get at least one chapter every week or so(?). [2/5] ===== Story development: kinda weird. the author tries to fix certain issues but ends up creating new ones in the process. the pacing is a bit too fast, which makes it hard to get attached or really understand what’s going on in situation x or y. oddly enough, this actually fits with martial peak’s own chaotic storytelling style. personally, though, i’m not a fan. [2/5] ===== Character design: the author had a cool idea—making the mc a cheerful, dumb, and naive dude in a cultivation world. on paper it sounds like a total flop, but it actually had real potential if done right. problem is... it wasn’t done right. The mc yells. a lot. like asta levels of yelling. he constantly screams about the system, his thoughts, and random stuff out loud. even the in-world characters complain about him yelling at certain times, so we know people can hear him. the thing is, asta has charisma. black clover’s author made him a likeable and impactful character. this mc? absolutely no emotional connection. from a reader’s pov, he just comes off as an overly annoying guy who won’t shut up. Same goes for the way he thinks. that overconfident attitude, the weird lack of emotional attachment to his mom—who he supposedly cared about a lot—and the reckless behavior... other shōnen mcs have this too (naruto, goku, luffy), but they have insane charisma and reasons behind their actions. even og naruto had kurama, and people would watch hoping he'd lose control. goku being serious is hype. luffy too. this mc? just sad. the reader knows he doesn’t have any trump card behind him, and knows he’s not smart enough to somehow escape disaster when things go south. The author made that really clear early on, and that’s why this mc is just irritating. he doesn’t stand out, he just feels like a parasite stealing screen time from a better protagonist—even if that other protagonist is yang kai, who’s also kinda mid. it’s like watching someone take the worst option between the red and blue pill, and getting stuck with both the bad versions. And lastly: you don’t develop characters by making them over-the-top reckless, cheerful, and "heroic." that’s lazy writing. even cold-blooded or psychotic mcs get proper development. fang yuan is a great example. (not calling him sentimental btw, read it however you want.) [1/5] ===== World background: honestly? terrible. like i said, the pacing’s too fast, locations are poorly introduced, and not even the names stick. even if martial peak (interpret this however) isn’t that detailed, the author should’ve at least tried to make the world feel more alive or even better than the source—which honestly wouldn’t be hard. And i’m saying this 'cause i know the author could pull it off if he tried. his writing isn’t bad, it’s actually above average for the site. [1/5] ===== Final rating: 2.0/5 I said a lot, and left a lot unsaid so this doesn’t turn into a whole essay. i really wish the best for the author—he seems like a fun guy based on how he replies to negative comments. that’s one of the reasons i even spent my time writing this, even while half-asleep. For anyone reading this: have a great day (or night). i’m off to sleep, writing all this made me even more tired 💤

Great to see the author return, this will be a good read 👍👌

Good luck with the re-write👍. You're doing great. So, don't worry about less support for now, people will come running when the chapters are piled up a bit.