I enjoyed the core concept, but the execution needs improvement. Frequent grammatical mistakes, inconsistent sentence structure, and the absence of quotation marks in dialogues made it difficult to follow. Polishing these aspects would make the story much more engaging.
I enjoyed the core concept, but the execution needs improvement. Frequent grammatical mistakes, inconsistent sentence structure, and the absence of quotation marks in dialogues made it difficult to follow. Polishing these aspects would make the story much more engaging.