An Oni in God's Valley

For some reason the author refuses to let the mc change the original storyline when he has clear opportunities which defeats the point of a fanfic.

Too much saviour complex.giving up a powerful devil fruit for plot despite knowing he wasn't part of original story.trying to save people he doesn't even know personally. I think if this continues mc wouldn't be able to kill any of the Marines he meet that are dangerous just because of plot like garp. Why does he even care about momonusuke

The fic is shit, the writing quality is immature, the mc is shallow in depth and has a savior complex all while not while to change the cannon plot line, the story development is buns, there is not development of the mc he just get his powers and stays powerful. Read it if you want, I’m just stating my opinion of it.

I quite like the story. The premise is interesting, and in a way I like that you left the Dragon Fruit for Kaido. Also I like the current fruit he has. Some might say that he is week for not takimg all advantages or all things for himself. But I think this proves his character as not just a greedy person. Also, the fact that he saved people. Not evryone is a psychopath like some of the reviewers. If you want a selfish caracter read another story or make your own. Not all stories have to pander to your preferences. Reviews should be about points that you think they can improve, not fully based on personal preferences that are not meet. Some of us like characters like our MC.

author refuses to let the mc change the original storyline

I’ll be honest, I wanted this to be good. I really did, I mean I’m Māori and seeing my mythology used in a story is cool. And the premise was so good but it was ruined by his hypocrisy. He wants to save godvalley citizens along with Kuma Ginny Ivankov which is fine I don’t mind a kind hearted MC. But then he decides to let Wanokuni stay enslaved all for the devil fruit he could get now, and he could just recruit vegapunk and get him to clone it. The author really wants to keep the story as close to cannon as possible which is stupid and boring, will keep reading cause I want this to be good

The character so far shows compassion when needed but knows how to show indifference. He's not a hero nor a villain. The writing is good. The story is not fast paced which is good but it's irritating. I wish I found this novel when it has 100-150 chapters but now I'm invested... So far, I'm enjoying this... The author knows his stuff...

Even though one of the hiccups from this fanfic is everyone complaining about the mc not changing the story, I think the Fanfic so far is good. I think the mcs powers and race are unique and look forward to seeing how his journey turns out. If the author sees this review I would think of in the future maybe changing some things. Maybe you could help free more slaves or one thing I was thinking of was saving rougue and ace. Even if you do that you could maybe hide rougue in the same place dadan lives so even though rougue lives she can be a mother figure for luffy too. That way ace, luffy, and sabo still end up becoming brothers.

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Im surprisingly loving this, hats off to you author, ever need ideas I got you.

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