Time Turner
We were born alone, we were also doomed to die alone.
But on that fateful night, he didn't die alone.
That's his biggest regret.
If only he gets a second chance.
He will make sure...
His family... his comrade... would be safe...
From that traitor...
*Modern Fiction*
Betrayed by the most trusted person in his family, cost him his parents. They were at war against each other. Trying to win back something they believed were supposed to be theirs. He lost the game, also his life, his remaining family, friends, and comrade. All because of that traitor.
Now that he is back. He will not fall into that death trap again. Even if he can't remember it. He won't fail. He will protect everyone.
Alfizar looked at the face he sees every day in the mirror. "Nothing's wrong with it, but.... shouldn't my face look older?"
Time passed by quickly and he realized that he had indeed died. But, who killed him?
A/N:
I'm back to my 3 chaps a week after a month of updating every day. For those who worried that I won't complete this original, don't worry. I will finish this original soon, story progress 49%.
Dear Readers Thanks for giving this lousy novel a chance. I'm Lionel, the Author of TT. I'm not really good at creating a summary or synopsis, so I will explain a few things about this novel. This is a story about a young man named Alfizar. And as the title says, this is about Time travel. And as usual, we need something to move the plot such as vengeance. For those who don't like harem. Don't worry. There will be romance. But not so early in the story. MC is not OP. This is about brotherhood, family. Where they hold each other up. But he is not a weakling either (well, in my opinion, that's it). there will be fights, blood, death, betrayal, action, a little suspense and some light tags such as school, light romance and a little comedy here and there so it won't be too heavy. Because I know not everyone can read heavy genre novel. So I want to balance it out. I hope you pay attention to small things such as clues that I mixed in with the filler (Don't worry, there's not much filler). Please tell me your thought about this novel so I can improve for the better. I'm not a native speaker, so please point out my mistake. I warned you, this novel has a natural flaw that came with the fact Inkstone has no Italic and Bold features. This is a novel that depends heavily on the scene changes between past and future. But because there is no Italic and Bold. I was forced to typed [*Flashback*] to notify the reader of the scene changes. this is not a fun thing to do, and I'm sure you won't like it either. But please ignore it because I can't do anything about it. I hope you enjoy my Original work. I present it to you, my dear readers. Time Turner TheLonerLion
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*Remember, this review is based on the first 5 chapters.* Constructive Criticism: I saw a few things that hindered the flow of the story and commented accordingly, however, other than that, I can't find anything to criticise other than the story feeling very slow building, and I don't know what advice to give to help in that matter, so... keep up the good work.;,;. Positive Feedback: Good plot (other than speed) and nice character build. I like how you seem to be having an overlay of what happened if he did and if he didn't get injured.;,;. Keep up the good work.;,;. Personal Feedback: I usually use this slot to say if I will or won't be continuing this book and why. Well, honestly, I really don't know how to respond to this book yet, will continue to read at a later time to determine if I wish to follow to the end.;,;. I do ask, however, to not let anything I or anyone else says stop you from finishing this.;,;.
Masih agak Bingung dengan story nya =_= dan terlalu kompleks? Mungkin belum sepenuhnya baca dan mungkin akan merubah review nya yang akan datang
Ughhhh, noooo!!! Moar release o(>0<)o I have reached the latest chapter TT_TT gosh. Urhhh, 140 words are too much, I want a ****** review =|
I didn't read it yet. So I'mma rate it 5 stars for now.... I'll come back to it later........................................................
Two word to describe confusing and complex. For me not worth it. Can try up yourself. .............................................................
5 stars coz' author is pretty cute. I think there's nothing wrong with the synopsis though. About the intro, It's also the usual start of any Isekai. Though you add more narrative, it doesn't really spice things up. I'm pretty sure majority of the readers already accepted the fact of the lack of substance of every Isekai's first few chapters. Thanks for the effort still. I suggest that you reduce the amount of details and focus more on a faster pacing. Too much narrative will throw off your readers. If you can't at least focus on the MC's POV when it comes to a narration. At least that's the reason why I rarely skim Er Gen's works.
The cover is good, match with the title, but if the story contains about past-present-future of the character, add clock shadow/transparent clock in left and right side will give a deeper meaning. About language, need more variations such as in this sentences : " a few with their stomach destroyed, the insides out on the ground" you can use belly to replace stomach and intestines to replace insides """"What?!""" The voices of disagreement were loud. you can use the capital letter to give loud effect WHAT than use double "" About character, you can add extra pages with character introduction if you have lot of character in your story
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Hi can you tell me how can i write a Novel like you I'm norwegian and english isn't my first language. Please help me. I owe you lot if you help me.
Huhuhuhu I am really sorry about this reviewer. I did not expect someone could troll like this. I apologize for that. Maybe this review could offset it