Reincarnate as Satou from DeathMa (DROPPED)

Look if you are going to make a tragedy you should have made the MC do something about it .if not just make him someone with no back story . you can't have his sister and niece raped and he doesn't do anything to those rapists . It makes him look like a idiotic ***** . Just make him die killing them or use one wish to torcher them. Your summary was good but I was disgusted by his behaviour of cursing the god or something when he could have just used the wishes to kill or torcher them , he didn't even try . Think of it as constrictive critisism don't stop writing and just change the backstory and make it better I'll change my rating. I'm also a fan of the LN and want to read your story......

This one is unreadable(sh*tty grammar). The MC is an selfish bastard worse than scum, he saw his sister and her ¿daughter?(probably don’t know for the grammar) being raped day and night by gangsters but when God give him 3 wishes he ignore all the sh*t his family suffered thanks to the gangster and wished his 3 wet fantasies, yo mention one of them is for the sake to rape... 😒 Can’t say anything about the story, really the grammar almost burned my eyes, is worse than machine translating with “Google Translator”.👀

trash of a story, started as tragedy.. I said ok some DM dark theme then it suddenly turned smut with nothing but sex -.- I tried passing those scenes to look for a story and then there is child rape and no story, I went back in story you see last time you see story is ch3 and all canon nothing new so read DM if you like it not this abomination

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The back story was unnecessary and character even after having such a background is really the worst person ever....... The back story was unnecessary and character even after having such a background is really the worst person ever.......

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I will shamelessly rate my novel like this why? Because I love the original work and it’s my favorite story. I read the webnovel started reading the light novel and even took up the manga. When the anime came out, I just had to make my love for the series known by making a fanfiction. I hope fellow DeathMa fans will enjoy it. Thanks for reading 🙏

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Complete and absolute garbage. Story was over in the 2nd chapter. 140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140

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I was happy when there’s someone making a fanfic about death march but you just ruined it bro and the opening chap is sh*t it seems you hate families and you’ve got problem with having them you just killed them all and even his sisters and nieces is killed and worse raped better if they survived but you just enjoyed writing about rape you should just killed them directly it’s a piece of sh*t would have been happy if you did not have a back story about that and just proceeded to him being reincarnated as satou and your unique story began but it began with a bang yes a bang to the holes of his sister and nieces wew fck this