Harry Potter and the true wizarding world

I've only read up to chapter 15 before I skimmed through the story and dropped it. The story lacks dialouge, like atleast 70% of the story is just a summarization on what was going on and I hated it because the writing quality is great but the story and characters can't develop properly if there's no dialouge. Hermione meeting Harry for the 1st time, Harry talking to the Goblins and talking to the Greengrass are very important to the story yet there isn't a single dialouge in those scenes. The relationship is so shallow because the readers didn't have many moments of them interacting/talking to each other. You can't make Harem work like that, author. I can't really think of a good reason why you would do your story like that.

The story is good so far. Sorry to hear you have been so busy. I hope things calm down enough so you can write more. But foremost, you need to take care of yourself.

Authors review " will be a very detailed story of the wizarding world outside the usual small circle of Hogwarts and make a crackdown on the simply idiocies of the orignal story which very conveniently overlooked" please support with patience and will be updated daily Thank You

There’s nothing good about this the characters are boring his reasoning for doing stuff is stupid and how he goes a Bout stuff is just as dumb

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I stopped reading because the author doesn't know what 'Show, don't tell' is. We want to read a story, not a summary. Writing Quality: 1s Stability of Updates: 1s Story Development: 2s Character Design: 1s World Background: 3s (It's already set in the HP world, so...) The total score: 1.6 (My advice, Not worth your time)

An interesting enough concept but unfortunately it was ruined. Writing quality is poor, as everything is one dimensional and lacks depth. Characters are boring. Most importantly is it’s practically just a summary, it feels more like the author uploaded his first draft by mistake. The story could have been good but it feels like there is no development because it’s impossible to form any attachment to the characters and their situations

Even after betrayal of bumbledork our mc is still an idiotic and naive SIMP running after bushy haired sl*t. Still goes to griffindork, still befriends red haired trash-bin, still an imbecilic moron.

So boring. Too much monolog in the beginning.

hello author, your story is great but lacks dialogs however I appreciate the storytelling and the world building. creating the perceptions of questions what if in the world of Harry Potter. Your au still needs a bit of polishing to be a great gem, still I appreciate all what you did in making your story great. we hope, we the readers see the day you finish your Au.

Oh, dear lord. I just can't get past the first five chapters. It's all villain exposition. Villain calls himself a genius more often than Ye. Author is right that it's detailed, but in the worst kind of way. I'd suggest a complete rewrite of the beginning at least. I can't say about the rest. One chapter is all the villain should be getting for his incessant monolog. Trim the fat my man.

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nothing of note changes from the primary plot, so why the time travel stuff. Even after betrayal of Dumbledork our mc is still an idiotic and still goes to griffindork, still befriends the same people still an imbecilic moron.

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