In Black Clover With Madaras Powers As Magic

Read this before you read the story. In the first couple chapters, the writing is bad, plot holes, and some other things. But it gets better as you continue. This is a warning before you read. If you read it and you read this, don't spread hate because I don't want to read that. But enjoy the story.

1- change the MC and make him an OC.....no point in removing memories....synopsis says reincarnated and title literally is ..' in-black-clover-with-madaras-powers-as-magic. so whats the point of removing memories when u can just make MC an OC with unique eye magic? I came for reincarnated MC not OC 2-Your massive 8 yr time skip ruins the story. explore some shit and add things, cause this removes any chance of CD and WD. idk, do it in a flash back style or something. 3- Give memories, not personality cause ur MC dosnt have madara personality just some cool kid that acts suspicious and a kid that saves chicks in trouble. The excuse of god merging it with MC dosnt work, cause madaras personality would override some mortal kid easy. No hint of a genius ruthless and merciless war veteran demi god. you cant pass it of as Semi OC cause of his current actions. grammar and eng is fine GL .

Look I like this fic. The author really tries. That's why I gave 5 stars, but ... Madara doesn't feel like Madara in this fic. Madara is supposed to be an unstoppable killing machine, a man who instills fear and respect... I just don't get a shred of that from the main character. Maybe it might change, but for now, Main Character is the weak point of this story.

I really do not know what you wanted to write, he says reincarnating and erasing his memories that is an oc more than a mc also has many faults that are noticed at first glance and the plot is poor with many gaps

Not Madara doesn't even seem like kid Madara or ***** Madara or Madara manipulated by zetsu just an OC you couldn't get a single aspect of Madara out of every single form of Madara.

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Isnt like Madara at all......................................................................................................................

I love it it's so good. now I'm going to put random words to make it be able to post. jdxjakduckalenfujkfknebcivosoalnfucidodkbfucisoejjcik.

Ability MS Madara. Jikan no kami (God of Time) Strongest ability of Madara's mangekyек sharingan. His left eye can rewind time back, changing the flow of time directly "rewinding" the events that have occurred and correcting them. Madara can rewind time by four minutes, and everything else, he can choose whether to roll back memories of someone about what happened before the rollback or not. The right eye allows you to freeze space and time in a limited radius, for exactly two minutes, everything that falls within its radius of action will be instantly stopped, during which time Madara can do anything with the enemy, for example, rip out a heart or chop off his head. The maximum radius of the vehicle is five kilometers, it can be used no more than twice a day. When using the technique, Madara selects individual objects using the sharingan. For example, it freezes only a separate part of the opponent's body, stops only his attack, or rewinds any or all of his actions for a certain moment. The technique will not affect Madara himself and everyone around him "except for the marked target", but without selecting the target "within the radius of coverage", the technique will affect everyone, even Madara himself. Even with the help of "Jikan no Kami" one can foresee an imprecise and very blurred future. Taken from the official + Naruto Special Fanbook.

He working on the rewrite definitely a book you should read ............................................... ................................................ .................................................

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