Son of Ajuka(DxD fanfic)

Lots of incorrect spelling, faults in grammar, and incorrect naming. The story tries really hard at being an appealing novel and could be, but the most likely prerequisite to that would be no foreknowledge about DxD or the ability to simply look up the highly contrasting material. Sadly because the ease of which looking up said material or already having the knowledge is so widespread the amount of "AU" the novel tries to employ makes it more something using DxD mechanics. There is a lot of butchering a lot of already known knowledge for not much reason or purpose other than the sake of the author saying "Why not because I can?" This is fine but not my cup of tea. There is already pre-established lore and information of this world that don't need much changing until the character is introduced. The biggest one would be the Astaroth clan trait, being completely justified as something entirely different all with the thought "That's weird thus happened to me without much reason. Ok cool no need to think about this anymore." The ability to control temperature can be done with magic, calculation speed is something much more passive, along with being both stronger and balanced. It seems more like the author was trying to justify not writing a character with a functioning brain. (This isn't about the clan trait needed to form thoughts its mainly both the author and mc have very flawed thinking and logic.) It might have been best for the author at this point to say that mc was a test tube baby as it would complement some pre-established knowledge on Ajuka or if that isn't even the most needed selling point then just make him a Sitri. That would help the clan trait along with solving having an mc who could form well functioning ideas and a water based clan trait. The hard on in which the author has on gunslinger is another issue that pertains with the overall pre-established world of DxD. This is pretty much a flawed idea because at its base all major opponents in the story are able to withstand normal guns or move faster. It's just the overpowered standing of the world. Justifying a gun that isn't a sacred gear or something realisticly is mainly used against cannon fodder is not well thought out. The same comparable nature of a magic empowered beefed up bullet from a gun in which could be destroyed or taken away, can be accomplished with magic. Create a compressed bullet made from devil magic and if the mc wishes to pursue magic of other pantheons could overlay it with those or simply train their ability to shoot a magical bullet to the same standard. This is just some tidbits on why this is overall flawed logic. I would like to add that I'm not trying to express any desire of putting holes in the story or crying out in how bad it is, these are my genuine criticisms that if can be addressed would help let the story be more fleshed out and less of a wish fulfillment. if wish fullfillment is what you are going for then completely disregard this comment.

That fic is so generic i can hear music . I mean there is nothing interesting going on the mc is not fun to follow and its like reading the same thing as countless other dxd Fics

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If it not for the guy hard carrying this fanfic by spamming five star reviews, this story wouldn't have such a high review. I went back to reread it and yeah, I just can't get into it.

The fic just isn't my cup of tea the MC wasted 2 years creating a gun that is basically useless when that time could of been used for something else.

I'll give myself 4 stars. Why not 5? well, I personally don't think it's worth 5 stars. It's definitely good imo, but not 5 star worthy good. I'm literally writing out of boredom after all.

I won't waste time writing a full review on this garbage novel with a mongrel of an author, just read the last chapter and you'll understand. ----------------------------------------------------------------------

Hm, it would have been much better without an end or with a good ending that tells a few sentences about his future life, but here you completely screwed up my friend

Even though you write this casually but still after reading this my mind was like [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=recommend][img=recommend]

It's just kinda Mid, I personally don't really like it all that much but there is still a semi-interesting story here, though I don't understand why the MC wants a gun in the DXD verse where anyone important can just dodge/deflect/tank or plot armor their way out of the bullet.

It's a great fanfiction ....................................................................................................................

Ok story horrible ending should've just abandoned it that would've been better than that dumpster juice called an ending 👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎

do not read ......................................................................................................................................................... bad ending

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