Young Justice: UnReal
[Dave, A young 25 year old man who works hard
everyday to realize his dreams, is currently dead. He's
been given another chance in a new world due to his
unexpected death. Having been Given wishes and sent to a new world, watch as he rocks his new world and quite possibly…the universe. Oh! Along with ladies who can't help but find him irresistible.]
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||Harem||Eventually Overpowered||Non-Beta Mc||Alpha
Mc||Smart Mc||Irresistible Mc||Handsome Mc||KryptonianMc||Cold Mc||Slow-Fast Pace Story||Action ||Romance||R-18||DC||Possible Slice Of Slife||Reincarnated Mcl|System||Yandere||
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That's it folks! If there's more, I'll add it. If you like Mc's wishes or the story in general, pls tell me. It could really motivate me to continue the story if I ever feel down or just not in the mood to continue. i know it sounds like I could possibly drop this story and im not gonna say I won't but your motivation would really stop me if I ever planned on dropping. Thanks a lot for giving this story a chance and not just ignoring it, it really means a lot.
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*Note: if you see any of my stories on Wattpad, then know they belong to me as long as the username is under Mystic_Lord.*
[•Chapter 1 ——> Chapter 11 are nothing more than his time on Krypton while Canon officially starts at Chapter 12. It’s highly recommended to read them as if you don’t then you’ll be highly confused by a lot of things such as his powers, his relationship, his technology, his mindset, his skills and his system. It’s okay if you don’t read it but don’t put comments That show you haven’t read them despite me telling you to. I’ll ignore your comment if you do. That’s it, thank you.•]
[Disclaimer: I own nothing but my Character. I also don’t own the cover.]
[Also, this is my first time writing so pls take it easy on me and offer constructive criticism. Thanks.]
Finally it’s hard to find decent if not note worthy dc fanfics where the mc is a fanfic. I really like the bases of the story so here’s 5 stars
Nice I like it till now not many chapters but still good now we need more chapters and I hope the relationships will be natural and not something forced like meeting for the first time and falling in love :D.
It’ s a very good story despite the ”pacing” which in my opinion it’s good , idont really find any real benefit in dragging the krypton arc/part? , in all seriousness most people would find more entertainment in interactions with other characters like Bats , Supes, or Kara and Ariella after the krypton Boom Boom if there’ s one (hope so) I find that way more entertaining then “General Zod “either way great work hope you continue with this amazing story [img=recommend]
This story had potential. But u basically limited yourself. The wishes while it had rules and being 5 the Mc got more than 5 wishes. The Mc have no sort of background what r is goals and belief. What drives him aside for want to live. The system given to the Mc handicap his growth in that he don't hv to try anything he's simply given what ever information he wants. Which to me is pretty boring most ppl read a fan fic to see an Mc grow, there is no room to grow when u can ask your system any question that couldve been learn by himself which could've been used to grow the character. You claim to no not want to nerf your Mc yet in the tournament arc he had to limit his powers. Why because he didn't wanna kill anyone. You could had only be at that strength for sum reason and had his opponents actually give him a proper challenge which would've fuel his growth rather than him walking though the entire thing learning nothing. The choice to fix his wishes rather than him finding a solution himself is rather lazy writing cuz all of those powers I bet there are ways to fix himself in the universe rather than ask god to help. Most of the time u spent creating this love story when simpley most of these girls attracted to him is because of his power rather thann his personality or not superficial reason. Could've been spent where Mc learning science or something interesting ( he's in krypton for godsake a freaking alien planet) rather than telling us he did it. Personally I'm not a fan of a harem when it's not the norm of the present society or has no purpose to the story other fan service. These are just some of the issues with your story to which I think limits it form being a really good fan fic.
I feel like the story could have been better in certain areas and he took way too long to make the journey to Earth and then the Arthur just ups and leave the story that's why I'm planning on trying to make a rewrite of the story if anyone has any suggestions and maybe can help me please leave a comment and if the Arthur sees this you deserve this because I'm taking your story and I'm going to make it great you left it is your fault[img=recommend]
is this novel dropped???? i really would like to read this novel.... please update more chapters.... this fanfic novel is really nice... i rarely find a decent dc fanfic novel... PLEASE UPDATE
The fanfic took a while to get well, and when it got the author simply abandoned it......................................... .................... .................... .................... .................... .................... .................... .................... .................... .................... .................... .................... .................... .................... .................... .................... .................... .................... .................... .................... .................... ....................
Great story honestly. chapters are long , meaty and hit the spot . the only thing stopping me from giving it a 5 stars is the update consistency...... its torment, torture and makes me feel like an addict . the chapters more often than not , make up for the wait time but it's still annoying
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I'm honestly glad I found this hidden gem it's only about 8 chapters in but it's already looking like its gonna be a fun read. Grammar is looking darn good especially compared to a lot of novels on here where you have to decipher what's being said. His character is moving along pretty well I guess the only thing I'd say felt wrong to me was he was kinda just was like " oh i died? oh well no point in crying about it" within what LOOKED like a short amount of time maybe you can jus chalk it up to him being in the dark space for a long time but it really doesn't take away from this. again only 8 chapter so alot cant be said about world background and story development but from what I'm seeing the author is atleast setting up his story to progress so I'm fairly excited to see where it goes. updating stability is a little lacking but its explained in the 8 chapter that it cant be as long if we want an update everyday which is fine to me we cant have both long chapters with a daily update as we dont want the author for this beautiful work to burn out and drop this.
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this one is a good story to read a good young justice fic, one of the first readers myself and I still have hope for the author to res and revive the fic even if a year past now
it's pretty good and one of the moments I liked was his wishes it's really well-though and one thing I don't like is stability of updates it's too slow
Its fire just the updates are very very inconsistent.
I continue on my crusade to reward understandable english that reads like it was written by someone who's actually fluent in the language, and boost the ratings of legible stories.