Overlord: The Multiverse

well there is quite a few mistakes like things being mentioned that we're actually never mentioned but even though the MC says they were mentioned even though they weren't and it's a Pokemon harem not my cup of tea

i can describe this fic with two words: child fantasy. and like all others children fantasies it have: - hollow characters - absolutely bland mc - a lot of illogical actions

22 chapters, or something like this. Start was a mindless cliche, but that's just how webnovel are... But after this was something unexpected! A weirdly realistic and unnecessary "funny" overlord story... Nope, not from the start of the series, where mamonga gets to a new world. But from playing a game... Which doesn't operate like a game at all. Somehow, one guy could take a raid boss, newly one, means he didn't overleveled them. It's called a "WOLRD ENEMY" not just for show. Which online game works like this? I just don't know... I'm not intrested in Sao level of playing a game in the novel. The stakes are null, how is this supposed to be interesting? Oh, right... We got a clown on a main character. Truly, those npc would appreciate you sense of humor. ... You get my point, it's just that's useless and unbelievable.

Great Start Bro continue what you are doing bro I hope it will become a masterpiece like Multiverse cliché or maybe better I sure think and hope so so please don't drop it or be concerned aur critisim it is good story

My Fan fiction so I must give it a full stat.

cringe as fuck. the story makes no sense. a lot of contradictions

Okay, the beginning was so-so, but it got better with the chapters. I like MC's personality. The interactions with the guild members were fun, which made me a little uncomfortable when they just disappeared. And now the chapters are getting shorter and lacking in content...

I got bored of the first arc and thought i would skip to the next one..... but the first arc is waaaaaaaaaaaaay too long and the next doesnt even start immediately. Too much noise in this fanfic not enough fun for me.

don't drop it plz I'm seen alot of authors just drop a good story after 2 or 3 chapters I'm like it so far

fue una buena lectura, pero la personalidad del protagonista no me gusta, hace tantas referencia y chistes que luego empezaron a volverse aburridos. Las interacciones con los otros personajes fue entretenida, pero sus decisiones son demasiado aleatorias, no parece tener un gran plan o no parece tenerlo, talvez sea por la gran cantidad de comedia. No fue tanto de mi agrado. 3☆ Diseño personaje 4☆ Todo lo demás

Good start and good potential only thing I don't like to much is the story being a bit heavy on the comedy aspect. Every sentence has a comedic comparison in it even while he is fighting. The unseriousness of the mc just doesn't make me feel like he is a vampire god just feels like a cocky jokester.

it was fine then Issey came around... a female Issei Hyoudou always kills off any and all interest I have for a DxD fanfic... a genderbent pervert, yeah no thanks... the story itself is passable, for me atleast, but that one detail just won't cut it... DROPPING this

Has far too much banter between the MC and Death, every chapter is full of them making jokes or flirting, and it’s just a bunch of generic lines you’ve seen a hundred times and unfunny or cringy jokes, it takes away from the current scene. It also desperately needs a proof read and an editor because it’s full of wrongly used words and sentences that make no sense whatsoever. I liked the concept but it feels like the supporting characters are so bland and underutilized, they feel nothing like their actual characters from the anime. Part of this is because the MC spends way more time talking with Death than the characters actually in the scene that there is no room for them despite being the ones the scene is supposed to revolve around.

Everything is going too fast. You don't even have time to enjoy the fanfiction .. . . ... . . ... . . ... . . ... . . ... . . ... . . ... . . ... . . ... . . ... . . ... . . ... . . ... . . ... . . ... . . ... . . .. . . ..