The Verlusian Conspiracy
Schemes, lies and plots. The devices people in power use to remain in their seats. Underneath of the conflict and power struggle an unknown entity is being born.
They are not born of greed nor thirst for lust or even crave for avarice. They are a phantom but a shadow the country has summoned in its turmoil.
Should chaos ensues shall the defenders of the land be enough in ensuring the safety of the people?
A new hope rises from slumber. As chaos engulf the land and hopelessness aflict the people, will his efforts be enough?
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droop bam! Moe here. Many things to be in questioning but no problemo. Because it is needed to progress the story. very sweet style of writing and the way things are portrayed are in the most efficient way it can be. keep it up, happy writing. so have a noodle art
Aaaaa I like dis! :D I really like this genre, so that's probably one of the reasons why I like this hehe! Okay, the writing is great, the grammar is great, and punctuation is good, although some parts could use a lil editing, but hey, it doesn't really matter because it's still a smooth read for me! :D I like the character's interaction, and I love the world-building here hehe! It felt realistic and I like the way the author describes everything hehe Great job, author! <3
Nice fast moving plot with a lot of twists and early momentum that pulls the reader forward. The pacing makes for a quick, enjoyable read. Definitely has a different feel with the mechs that gives it a nice niche. Difficult to give concrete feedback on the writing quality, because it seems like an editor, or just as the author writes more over time, would mainly help to address a lot of the readability issues. I think it mainly comes down to basic proofing, which is the universal challenge for all authors (nearly impossible to proof your own writing). Keep it up, author! :)
Ive only read 6 chapters and i know its hard to determine things from a less broad perspective but this book is greatly written, the execution of setting, tone and mood emerging suspense, the descriptions ON POINT! the action sequences especially were something that I took notes from because, oooooof.
I really love the mecha fight scenes in the chaps I read so far! they were described very well 👍 about the novel- has a futuristic setting, cool description with realistic details, maintains a good flow no matter if dialogues or war scenes. the characters are sketched well complementing the plotline. I hope this novel gets big!
Cool futuristic military action in this one. The story is in no rush to get where it needs to go, nicely building up the characters and unveiling the intriguing plot. The mecha fight scenes are exciting and well-done. Great reading material so far!
Another aspiring Filipino like me! I gotta say your story was original and it was interesting! Even though english is not the main dialect, the author was effective in narrating things! A rather challenging task for us with language barriers. I say job well done! Nice novel by the way!
Writing Quality: 3/5 The grammar needs work in the wording, punctuation, and I saw one space problem. Other than that, your style isn't bad. Updating Quality: 5/5 I put that for everyone. Story Development: 4/5 You pace your story really well, and the transitions are good too. I like your plot. Character Design: 4/5 I enjoy your characters, they are refreshing, although I still feel a slight detachment from them, that could just be me. World Background: 4/5 Not bad at all, you give enough information to build a picture of your world and what to expect. Fixing your wording would make it better.
Your grammar,(Tenses and punctuation in particular) takes me out of the unique story that you present, however this uniqueness stems mostly from the under-utilized military genre. Your characters although well defined, are cheapish and flat, sewing confusion into the plot as it is easy to confuse one, for another. The world, however is very unique. A great background for your story and honestly impressive.
Interesting characters, the plot flows with grace and a very capturating setting. You did a good job portraying the grim touch so natural to the story. You definitely need to work with the grammar, it can make some parts awkward to read. But overall this is a solid, good work that has no trouble hooking readers. Good job.
Hello there~ Firstly, I never read books with military genre before, I didn't really want to explore this genre until I came across this novel for a review. I just want to say that, you've got a wonderful descriptive writing. I honestly really like the way you write, you sound very eloquent too and I learnt a lot from you. There's really nothing bad I can say about this novel but just to keep writing and frequent updates for your readers. Great Characters ✔ Descriptive Background ✔ Plot ✔ Chapter Length ✔ Great job to the author ! -varean
Military, war, MECHA! It's intriguing and full of action, the characters are interesting. I liked the introductory chapters, with the intrigues. The actions scenes are good as well. Keep it up, author!
The story is intriguing, making the readers want to read more. This was the first time I read a military genre, I love the setting and the description, the thriller which wanted to convey in the story. As you go along, reading the chapters, can't help but wonder what will happen next. Keep it up author-san.
I enjoy this type of archetype, when war and stuff is involved. I'm intrigued with the story and I find myself wanting to know more about this world and where it will end up going. Now, the only problem I have is how the writing is. Of course everyone makes mistakes and there are typos, I'm not even focusing on that, but it's the pretense. I've noticed how the author phrases sentences in present form. For example- "The man walks to the door and opens it. Once he's inside he sees food and walk over to the food." If that's the author's way of writing and they're comfortable with it then I'm cool with that, but throw in some typos or misplacement of words and I start to get annoyed. Besides that, this story is great, keep it up!
The story is well written with good pacing and well defined characters. The setting is interesting and the character dynamics are good to read as well.