The Treasure King
Gray always knew he was special. He was blessed with a pair of heavenly eyes that saw the world like nobody else. He had dominating strength, honed by the savage wilderness of the King's Mountains. He was meant to achieve great things, to surpass his upbringing as an impoverished miner.
His belief was confirmed one day when a beautiful fairy sister fell from the sky into his lap. She didn't stay long but she left an unforgettable impression. So, he set out into the endless world of cultivation to see her again and win her heart.
He would encounter, along the way, countless treasures including ancient weapons, heavenly gems, rare metals, and sacred medicinal pills. He would meet all kinds of people and develop unbreakable bonds. He would struggle against enemies that challenged him to the physical and spiritual limit. He would even be dragged into an existential war for the human race against their eternal enemy.
And perhaps, he would also find the time to establish his own dominion as the one and only Treasure King!
Book 1 - Lord of the Jade Plains
The Jade Plains, filled with great herds of bison and ferocious packs of wolves, was a dangerous frontier region where two towns fought for supremacy. These two towns, and two families that controlled each, were old foes destined to clash after a long period of fragile peace. The one that emerged victorious would become the undisputed lord, the owner of all the wealth that lied beneath these windswept hills and endless waves of grass. But nobody was prepared for the arrival of an exceptional young man from the mountains taking the first stumbling steps on a path to greatness.
Author's Note:
This novel has gone through major edits. Older versions of chapters have been removed. Returning readers are encouraged to start over from the beginning. I hope you enjoy!
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Although the descriptions were kind of basic, the story looked a little good until the FL was introduced. The story then became a hero saving the princess. The MC then became a r3tard idiot which constrasts from what was described of him before. He literally becomes a child that constantly asks her to marry him and talks childishly while he gives her everything in his possession. He literally lost everything for all his years of work and has zero emotion other than him wanting to marry her. Then later MC shows girl his secret treasure that he found with his detecting instinct ability that he literally put earlier on how careful he must be to hide it as it would bring the death of him, flew out the window. Only thing that stayed was his ability to make people lose track of him so no1 will find his die hard love. Once the woman was healed enough to fight the weak animals she didnt so it gives more time for mc to shine. Also once she finds his treasure she starts actively stealing it, then he offers her it and she "hesitates" when she was already stealing it with her cultivation? What? Also once MC returns hurt she starts showing that she is interested in him. Ofoej3nfo9rb3 The romance in this novel could be compared to most harem novels. I wouldnt even be surprised if it does become one. I gave up on the story once this annoying torture of love filler lasted for more than 10 chaps, judging from that and the chase scene, it seems there will be a lot of filler in this novel. I only rated this above 3 stars because of me being interested in first few chaps and how his ability will turn out. Lastly if author is reading this and actually cares about suggestions, only suggestions I have is to try and plan out your book more before writing it as it is hard to change. It sort of feels that each chapter is improvised making the filler a lot. Also try looking at synonyms possibly as I think some of the non landscape descriptions you did couldve been better, especially the ones related to characters. For example emotions. Also, theres only 4 revs and all high, so I wouldnt be surprised if your one of those authors that delete reviews, so if you do I'll be back :)
This is the author. This is my second novel. It is my take on a xuanhuan adventure, weak-to-strong, poor-to-rich epic tale. It will be a serious novel and I want to explore my own story line ideas instead of repeating the same tired cliches in the genre. The MC will have an OP cheat power but it is all completely enclosed within the world. Romance will be emphasized, as well as harem, but the harem won't be too big. Max will be three or four. I am also aiming for major story arcs that have a beginning/middle/end and can be satisfactory stories in their own right. It won't be an endless treadmill like other webnovels. My aim is to have story arcs around 100 chapters in length and perhaps seven arcs.
I am still in the early chapters but I'm a fan of the author first book since the very start. The story has a good flow if you are following the author in the past. So terms of writing quality, stability, story development, character design and world background, it is going to be awesome. The real story actually starts at Chapter 6 (I feel) and please give the story a chance till until then and the story will be even more exciting. I wish Gray has a chinese name:X
It's really interesting story.👏👏👏 I love cultivational novels. Here hero is naive. He mad about FL but as you suggest the ML is going to be weak to strong, i am sure story is going to get more interesting after each chapter...👍👍 Well done author great job👏👏👏
This book is a treasure just like the title. The author has depicted the scenes so clearly that I could imagine them right away. Good work author. There are absolutely no complaints when it comes to writing or grammar. Everything is perfect. Keep up the good work author
This one's a good one. There's good grammar and punctuation with pacing that's just absolutely perfect so that each chapter feels fulfilling. The characters and their dialogue are entertaining to read and just... the author's really, really good.
Ive read lots if books on this sIte and i love to find differnt Or unique ones. This book blew me out of the water with it uniquness and enjoyability. Had to coM mment just so this can get a rating so more will be able to read.Not many chapters yet but I can see so much for the future of it.
An interesting start to a cultivation novel. I like the eye powers of the MC and am interested in seeing where that leads. So far no cliche face slapping. The MC is naive but doesn't have the mental of capacity of a retard like most translated xuanhuan MCs. Only downside is that it has so few chaps.
excellent work 👏 👍 👌 Love the Thousands of years ago, the reptilian beings [from the constellations Orion, Sirius, and Draco] intervened on planet Earth and began interbreeding with humans. Not physically, however, but rather through the manipulation of the human coding, or DNA. Icke states that it is no coincidence that humans have fundamental reptilian genetics within their brain.
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do you guys what is my favourite genre of novel? cultivation world without clichés or repeating arcs these are really hard to find but I found one here
The story was very interesting in the beginning, but then I started to lose interest once that girl appeared in the MC's life. I'm not a fan of romance in general, so that may not bother other readers. The synopsis was interesting as well, but, you basically just told me the entire story: I almost dropped the story right there. If you change the synopsis just a bit so people would want to know what happens, I think you'll gain more readers. I didn't see much grammatical errors, however, there were some. The MC was interesting at first,but when the girl came, it's like his whole personality flew out the window along with his logic. The character design though is designed well, I can see what people are really like so that's good. The world background was detailed for me to imagine it so that's fine. The story devolpment seems paused, I don't know if you intended to have a filler but it feels that way and I feel like that takes the attention away from the actual story. However, this story had great potential, and I hope to see it grow into a great novel.
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