Karma Of Vengeance
'Where there's light there's darkness'
The truth about the world Filled with good and evil.
"Karma" Is the example of good and evil, a power that is based on how they'll use it, for good or evil, protect or saving people, killing or cause havoc to the world.
There's one boy who is eagerly wanting to save people but he can't, because he's very weak he strives to be better be the strongest but no matter what he does he always fails.
Then suddenly a weird ritual gave him powers and that is "Karmanic binds" A contract between realms giving him powers to fight the strong.
His karma is "Karma of vengeance", the more vengeful he is the stronger he gets as he continues to grow he gets stronger.
But the turning point, he failed to save many lives although he was given the strength to fight against the strong even if he's strong there will always be someone stronger than him.
Author here, this story is about a young boy who is very weak and often getting beaten up by the strong, but suddenly he becomes stronger because of a mysterious power that he was given, he uses his powers to protect lives and fights those who preys on the weak. if there's any grammar mistake in the novel, please do forgive me that I'm not very good at english and I'm still a beginner.
This was quite good for the author's first novel. The writer's intentions were clear and he clearly had a steady plot in mind. However, there is a LOT to complain about. I'm guessing English isn't the author's first language. The story itself wasn't bad but the English was absolutely terrible. Errors from all aspects of english were everwhere, straight throughout. Grammar, punctuation and capitalization needed the most work. Starting with the title, why is it in common letters? Titles are supposed to be written like how it is on your book cover, words starting with capital letters. The synopsis was poorly structured and confusing. For some reason, all the writer's sentences started with common letters. Sentences should always start with a capital letter. The novel started well without these errors for like the first few paragraphs of chapter 1 then it just gradually started getting worse and worse. Sentences started with common letters and names were in common letters. Please note that names should start with capital letters. There wasn't a proper flow and the story seemed rushed. There were also too many redundancies. The author is clearly trying to get the reader to admire the mc and sympathize with him but I just find him stupid and annoying. The reader would probably sympathize more if we knew why he was always being beaten up and why he needed to save others. Being beat up because of being weak and "saving" people because his father asked him to isn't very sufficient. I'm not saying you should change his reasoning but try and make it a bit more substantial. I recommend that the author use granmarly to assist with his writing or get himself an editor. Overall, this novel has a lot of potential but is seriously plagued by poor grammar and English skills. I find the plot very interesting and would love to continue reading but the errors are just too unbearable. This was my honest review, I hope you can work on your craft and get better and better. [img=recommend]
wowwwww I like these stories although it's almost hard to understand sometimes but awesome work![img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
your stories are getting better now, keep up the good work![img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend] but still write better so i can understand.
Man that's a great story for a Beginner, Keep on writing and don't forget to improve you skills on the same time. And last don't abandon the story. All the best👍😁
Well you need to be better at writing it Though it has flaws but still keep it up bro The story is great but you need better prologue the writing is A mess but at least the story is good so do your best!
storynya mayan lah sasuga temen gw the story is good very nice the writing mayan lah not too bad tapi chapternya short beut tapi makin lama makin long sih lu nya kurang bikin panjang storynya🗿
in the first chapter it wasn't very promising at all, but when i read it and read it it starts to get interesting the story is amazing as it progresses but the writing makes it hard to understand.
overall, not a very bad novel the stories are very interesting though it has few grammar mistakes, the novel is quite promising yet underrated, keep it up!
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Actually, I can spot the writer's improvement in writing through the chapters. First, I really appreciate you trying to improve for the sake of getting a better read. Second, you developed a very unique style that kept me hooked to the story till the end. This is fresh, captivating, and promising. The plot is really exciting. I feel this has more plot twists and surprises to come. I'm looking forward for more!
The pace of the story is good from what I've read so far. Some parts are kind of confusing but it'll be better once the author entered the editing phase. Characters are decently made too. Overall, this one has a lot of potential~
Let's get the big one out of the way first, the grammar is not the best. You are a new writer and English isn't your first language so you cant be blamed. The story and its characters are interesting and you are good at world-building, keep up the good work :)