The Hero of Destiny
I was going around my everyday life when suddenly something very strange and creepy happened! I still didn’t understand the mystery behind my sudden death. One moment I was a normal office employee in a small game company, the next moment I was a slave who fainted just from getting slapped!
“Hey Delta, why did you kill me?”
- “Delta brought host into this world for a purpose. Host must save Goddess Psais because without her permission, Delta cannot send host back to his world.”
A purpose, a System, a Status Window and a magical world filled with magical mysteries. Though I desired for change from my monotonous life, I now realize that change was not always for the good! Now I want only one thing more than anything, which is to go back to the life which was safe and quiet.
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This is a story about a damsel in distress who is captured by a monster and our protagonist is tasked to be the hero who saves her.
However, is the damsel, a Goddess, truly in distress?
Is the monster that killed Gods and Goddesses and enslaved Destiny, truly a villain?
Is the human, who is forced to be a hero, truly a Hero?
Follow Deniel in his journey as he explores a new and mysterious world after being reincarnated as Alex. Watch him make mistakes and learn from them.
Watch how a normal human with a frail physique and a weak mentality grows to be the strongest being that can even rival the Gods! Watch him find out what Fate truly is and how greedy Death can be for a soul.
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[P.S: This is the first time I'm writing a novel and English was not my first language. Therefore, please feel free to point out any mistakes whether in the plot or in the grammar. Every comment and review is important for me. Also, since I've just started, I know the quality is very poor but I promise that it will improve overtime so please bear with me. As I'm not much experienced in this field, the pacing is really slow for now but once the world building and the magic system is in place, the pacing is going to increase. Thank you :)]
***Please keep in mind that the novel is purely based on fiction and it has no relation with real names or real events. The names in the novel are just a fragment of imagination and does not refer to anyone or anything!***
The novel still has a few chapters, so it’s too early for a more thorough critique. However, it stands out for the emotional immersion of the protagonist, who transitions from a mundane life to a dangerous, fantastical world. A positive aspect is how the author successfully conveys the character’s internal struggle, drawing the reader into his despair and his efforts to adapt to his new reality. This creates empathy and curiosity about his evolution. One area for improvement would be balancing the game mechanics with the narrative. At times, the detailed explanations of the system can interrupt the flow of the story. Simplifying or better integrating these elements could help the plot flow more naturally, though it doesn't detract from the overall reading experience. In summary, it's a story with great potential that could benefit from more fluidity in its construction. Good luck with your writing!
I am writing this after reading up to chapter 16. The story is interesting and has some new concepts. The plot progression is slow but only up to the point when the author is explaining about the System and the status window. I have read many System novels but only a small number of them actually details about the Status Screens. This novel is one of them! Then there is the world building. Honestly, the number of chapters is still less to tell exactly how good the world building is but from they way the author described the village, I can tell they would do a good job in this field. There are many good things about the novel like daily updates, good writing quality and a nice description of everything. But let's also talk about some drawbacks. One could say that the story is moving very slowly but I am a LOTM reader so I like the pace. The one thing you should work on is to give some ups and downs to the story to make it more interesting. Although I say that, keep doing what you're doing as I can see it improving as the new chapters come in. I like the novel and will continue reading it👍. I hope it keeps on getting better and better...
Well, I'm the author of this novel so I might as well just give it five star! Very good novel, highly recommended! 😁
The writing is very interesting and makes me really look forward to the upcoming developments. The world-building is detailed, too. Keep it up! I hope you continue to improve and succeed!
now comes the rating since i finished the current novels the story power system is creative and thats what i like about novels new concepts something to draw your interest to keep you reading
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This novel is very wonderful, I advise you to read it 👍👍