Hacker System

This story start off well. It managed to capture the attention of a non IT people like me to a certain extent. However, it started to go downhill afterwards. There are too many unnecessary points that acts up as a filler. A filler is good, if you can learn how to make it work. A great filler is when the reader reads it, they notice it contains some sort of information. You can use fillers as a foreshadow for future chapters. Take some time to brush up your vocab, grammar and spelling. In the beginning it was quite okay, but I saw more and more mistake happen later on. Write at your own pace. Some people can write 1+++ words in three hours, minus the editing, while some might take longer. I assume the mistakes are caused by you trying to rush the chapter out. Great idea, but it was all a bit jumble up. A few contradictions in the story--> 1. Ting is poor, it doesn't really make sense for him to take taxi (in the beginning) or eating fast food that often. I'm not sure where you are from but I'm pretty sure a box meal is much cheaper than fast food. 2. He chose programming to study but his results is so terrible that he was then expelled. Try to write the back story. Why he chose programming? Interest? If he was interested in it why did he performed badly? Was it because he have to work part time to support himself that he don't have time to study? Plausible, but then you have to write what happen to his jobs when he starts doing task for his system. 3. Again, he is poor, does it make sense for him to live outside instead of dorm? (I understand the need for him to be alone, again use a suitable back story for it) My advice: 1. 're-write the whole story from the beginning. (You haven't gone far) 2. Make the character background hit the rock bottom before getting the system (sympathy always works) 3. Less childish girl/woman imagination (we don't want Ting to be a pervert don't we?) 4. Try to stick to one POV throughout the chapter. I saw sometimes you switch from 3rd POV to 1st POV. If you want to make multiple POV in one chapter, separate it nicely. Anyway, good luck. You can improve your work. Work hard!

Great story, but there needs to be more. Characters story put together pretty well. My only problem is that there isn’t enough chapters.

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It is excellent . It was best element to it. It world be great to have more chapters.

It’s very interesting and makes you want to continue reading as it catches your attention can’t wait for the next update hopefully soon 🥰 Thoughts: Why does he have to tell someone about his space make him keep it a secret He asked a lot about the system characters “the teachers” is it a hint that they are real or that’s just his character?🤔

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Ting Wo, 19 year old 2.year at The University Of Everlasting Dreams for Computer Science is expelled.His Dad died, left with only his mom and him. Having gotten expelled from university, he goes to a bar and gotten drunk and fell down a flight of stairs. A voice sounds in his head. “Welcome to The Hacker System!” Join Ting Wo as he try’s to change his life once and for all and begin on his way to become the number one Hacker in the world. He get in system take qest, take lessons,...I love story but no update year so droped ):

Pretty great but could use a little more hard work but is on the way to being one of the best novels so work hard young man work hard to please all your fans and such

really interesting story i like it :) the idea of the system is not really something new but you did well with it and kept me hooked :p the stability of the updates is not there yet, i hope that you could write a schedule sometime^^

Why not MC hacking the system? Its easy make up MC. Keep going update this novel my be there many people support you. Thank for ever chapter for your update hope you succes

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I found it interesting, usually this isn't what I read but I did anyway good job on it. I recommend this to people if your into hacking and systems also if your not into romance because so far there is none cp27.

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I think that you should try to update more often. This story is really great, and i really enjoy it. However, i am already up to date with a the chapters and waiting for more is quite hard.